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Sunrise, Sunset: Story Poem

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Story Poem Contest sponsored by Joanna Daniel

July 12, 2023

The sun began to rise at the pale wink of dawn just as the moon wearied and started to fade. There were dappled rays spread across my lawn then disappeared behind a maple forest glade. Refulgent light hovered above earth at midday while the moon rested before her nightly reign. As people basked and romped all day in play, celestial bodies pretend that it's sleep they feign. The sun bowed and dimmed on the cusp of twilight Awakening, were the cratered eyes of the moon. A golden glow of sunset was ebbing before my sight and Luna was rising with the trilling song of a loon. Ra slipped into the sea as the horizon darkened. Moonlight nodded to stars in a sky of midnight blue. A deep sigh was heard; to the moon the sun harkened. He whispered to her in their passing, "I bid you adieu."

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Terry Flood

Date: 7/25/2023 3:42:00 PM

And all in just one day. Well done, Lin. A smartly observed and imagined write. Congrats on an atmospheric win. Terry

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 7/25/2023 9:30:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your wonderful "Sunrise, Sunset" write. Have a great day....................

Lin Lane
Date: 7/25/2023 9:38:00 AM

Thanks, Paula.

Joanna Daniel

Date: 7/25/2023 1:31:00 AM

The eternal story of the beauty of the sunrise and sunset, great pen, Lin:) congratulations:)

Lin Lane
Date: 7/25/2023 10:19:00 AM

Thanks so very much, Jo.

Lin Lane
Date: 7/25/2023 9:37:00 AM

Thanks so very much, Jo.

Bill Baker

Date: 7/14/2023 10:22:00 AM

Pleasant short Narrative poem, Lin. I enjoyed the easy flow of your words and the sprinkling of alliteration. You saved the best for the final two lines, A deep sigh was heard; to the moon the sun harkened. He whispered to her in their passing, "I bid you adieu." Smiles ~ Blessings Bill

Lin Lane
Date: 7/14/2023 10:30:00 AM

I always appreciate a reader's comments as to what they enjoyed the most. Thank you for offering your thoughts, Bill.

Jay Narain

Date: 7/13/2023 10:47:00 AM

Nice poem from sunrise, sunset and night. Good story like poem.

Lin Lane
Date: 7/14/2023 10:29:00 AM

Thank you very much for reading me and commenting, Jay.

Mike Gentile

Date: 7/13/2023 7:05:00 AM

Lin, you have certainly captured the beauty and amazement of nature with your dawn to dusk verses!! Lovely to read this morning ! HappyThursday xxoo

Lin Lane
Date: 7/13/2023 7:06:00 AM

Good morning, Mike and I am always grateful for your visits and encouraging comments. Thank you. xo