Derrick Burton Poet Free verse

Sunrise On the Milkyway

A slow bright rising 
 prevailing amongst 
vast darkness.
Set a sail on an ocean 
of stars, mixed colours:
Blazing, ripping, pulling.
Evolving on the shoulders
of millenniums , one after another
Constipating life.

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Debbie Duncan August 10, 2013 at 12:24 AM nicely done ;}

Sara Kendrick June 2, 2011 at 5:35 PM It has a beauty all its own that is your work and God's ..Thanks for stopping by..Sara

Phyllis Babcock May 28, 2011 at 8:08 AM Awesome write and imagery on this poem Derrick. Thank you for your comments, much appreciated. God Bless Phyl

James Foulk May 27, 2011 at 12:53 PM a great write Derrick, enjoyed reading this one.

Charles Henderson May 26, 2011 at 1:49 AM Pun intended, but that would be a lot of crap. Good poem Derrict. appreciate you commenting on mine. I'm going back to find a few more of yours. Charles

Zzzzz Zzzzz May 25, 2011 at 3:48 AM A good, descriptive write, using poetic language. Regards, Robert.

Andrea Dietrich May 24, 2011 at 8:21 PM Awesome imagery, Derrick!! Unusual poem.

Carolyn Devonshire May 24, 2011 at 4:19 PM Brilliant images of the night sky, Derrick. Taking a three-day fishing trip and I know we'll be able to see the Milky Way as well as some planets when we're far offshore. The last line was very intriguing. Love, Carolyn

Dr.Ram Mehta May 24, 2011 at 3:47 PM beautiful imagery to create a fine visual, derrick

Daver Austin May 24, 2011 at 2:17 PM A mind blower, the Milkyway. I like this poem mucho. LOve, daver

Red Fiery May 24, 2011 at 1:41 PM rich imagery with an expensive language....u have presented this very beautifully....marvellous !

James Foulk May 24, 2011 at 1:18 PM yes great imagery and well done. thank you for commenting on Tender Heart.