Sunlight of Gold

Sunlight of gold
Dancing on the water
Of the slow paced
River where swans

Swim, get nourished
Play, where the swans 
Form a heart when
Their heads touch

External sign of love
Mated for entire life
If one dies the other
Despairs, grief stricken

May love again
But possibly die from grief
Committed love contained
Why can't people watch birds
And do the same
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Chachere Avatar
January 24, 2010 at 10:00 AM
mated for entire life. some really are bonded as one and its scary to think about one losing the other. thanks for the thoughts in this great poem you wrote.<: -Always Lynette
Hilliker Avatar
January 15, 2010 at 2:19 PM
Beautiful write, Sara! Wouldn't it be great if we learned from them rather than having disposable relationships?
Culverhouse Avatar
January 13, 2010 at 9:02 AM
nice one mom, I like it!!
Freeman Avatar
January 10, 2010 at 11:51 AM
Unfortunately not all people, being lost in their wilderness minds, can see the simplistic power of their own Love's inner being, as you, your self. As you can see Love in nature. Keep this depth of innocent perception Sara, it is of the power of your Love. Sincerely, Love, Moses
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January 10, 2010 at 6:03 AM
Beautiful poem with beauty of swan like birds and their deep love for each other. What a lovely Poem to tell something which we can learn these birds. Great write. Thanks for lovely reading. I have placed a new Long love story poem the Boatman's Song 1to7 and more. Hope you would like it and let me have your valuable comments. With best wishes and love Ravindra
Strand Avatar
January 10, 2010 at 12:22 AM
Keep sprinkling this place with your sunlight Sara.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments
Dietrich Avatar
January 9, 2010 at 6:53 PM
So nice, Sara. I did hear about swans. they mate for life, right? You did well comparing them to us (or should I say CONTRASTing them to us. ) we need to do the same, as you eloquently stated.Luv, andrea
Meade Stephenson Avatar
January 9, 2010 at 12:12 PM
Profound write here Sara and I agree humans could learn a few things from the animal kingdom about committed love and total loyalty! Thanks so much for sharing and for taking the time to read my poetry. Many thanks too for your always kind comments. All is so very truly appreciated! Have a blessed day~Mary
Richards Avatar
January 9, 2010 at 10:46 AM
We could learn so much from nature, if we are willing to humble ourselves long enough. Nicely written, Sara. ~ Carrie
Pickett Avatar
January 9, 2010 at 8:33 AM
The tales of love and infatuation has inspired a new poem.... Excellent write Sara.....:JP]
Haick Avatar
January 9, 2010 at 8:30 AM
My sentiments, exactly, Sara! Even the animals know what loyalty and devotion is. They know instinctively that there is order in the universe-we humans with all our gifts-free will, intelligence, etc., fail to grasp it and even when we do, we still "choose" to believe the lie that the world began out of chaos-"one big bang". We're disloyal, even to the one person who has given their all to us for years! Sorry, for the preaching!! Great write! Peace, Audrey
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January 9, 2010 at 8:06 AM
Awesome Sara. i've often thought the same about Sand Cranes. They also mate for life. Thanks for this great thoughtful poem. Robert
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January 9, 2010 at 7:55 AM
Amazing image of the heart that's formed by the profiles of the swans, Sara. Very nicely written poem about creatures who mated for life! If you find out why people can't do the same, please share this with us. Great poem! Love, Carolyn (And thanks for your kind words; I'm doing better now.)
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