Len Gasun Poet Triolet

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Poem inspired by a form called triolet form.

Sun Dancing

The sun shimmers resplendently on a calm sea,
 It synchronizes with the glistening ripples;
Its graceful sways captivated the whole of me,
 The sun shimmers resplendently on a calm sea.
Its fabulous dance completely makes me happy,
Its silver reflection on sea water tickles,
The sun shimmers resplendently on a calm sea,
Cradling my weary soul, giving hope that sparkles.




March 1, 2014   12.30am



 It’s my first try of a triolet poem- 12 syllables per line. I hope I did it right.  HAVE A HAPPY AND BLESSED 1ST DAY OF MARCH 2014. Wish you all the best! Big Hugs!

First Place
Contest: Impress Me with a small poem II
Judged: 3/5/14
Sponsor: Poet Giorgio V.

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Paul Callus November 12, 2015 at 10:13 AM Hi Leonora:) Having a peep at some of your past poems! The repetitive lines of this poem bring out the dance feeling of the sun on the glimmering sea. Still a delight to read. Hugs // paul Len Gasun November 14, 2015 at 9:09 AM Thank you so much my very dear friend, Paul. I appreciate so much your kind visit and unwavering support. More power and blessings! Many hugs from me to you!

Patricia L Graham March 24, 2014 at 12:38 PM So warming and relaxing. Congrats

Poet Destroyer A March 16, 2014 at 11:56 AM How are you doing my wonderful BFF.. Thank you so much for stopping by and enjoying my contest wins. I'm always happy when I see you around. Sending hugs, I hope you have a happy day... See you in a bit, my sis .... Love Linda

Connie Marcum Wong March 14, 2014 at 6:46 PM Ah the negative ions of the sea refresh and gift one with the purity of peace as your poem does. It is lovely Leonora. Thank you for the lovely comment you left for my recent poem. I hope you are well? I keep trying not to catch what my granddaughter comes down with. I just got over bronchitis (cold/flu). So great to be back reading poetry again. Blessings

Bukang Liwayway March 7, 2014 at 8:48 AM this will happen on my grand vacation soon ;) An awesome piece from my dear friend. Congratulations on your win. mwuah!!!!!!!!!!!!!

S.Jagathsimhan Nair March 7, 2014 at 1:51 AM Happy to read you. Congrats, leon!!

Poet Destroyer A March 6, 2014 at 11:53 PM A sweet and beautiful poem Leonora, adoring every line. Calm, filled with tranquility. You are a true sparkle.... Leo, my sis and BFF.... Miss you, and it feels good to be back.. Glad I got to text you all the time... However, I did miss reading and commenting your poems... :) love you..Linda

Andrea Dietrich March 6, 2014 at 8:16 PM Congrats on your win with this wonderful poem, sweetie!!

Paul Callus March 6, 2014 at 3:11 PM sun's splendor ... and writer's descriptive powers.//congrats on your win.//paul

Abdulhafeez Oyewole March 5, 2014 at 1:03 PM Beautifullly written! Congrats on the win!!!

Roger Horsch March 5, 2014 at 7:55 AM Hi Leonora, I had to say congrats on this wonderful win......Hugs.....Roger

Anne-Lise Andresen March 5, 2014 at 7:17 AM - My friend Leonora, congratulations on your lovely winning poem in Giorgio A.V. contest ! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Monterey Sirak March 5, 2014 at 6:52 AM Lovely and soothing. congrats on your win

Kayod5 Kayode March 5, 2014 at 6:20 AM Congrats on the worthy win Leonora.

Dr.Ram Mehta March 5, 2014 at 5:12 AM Lovely poem. Congratulations on the fine win, leo

Ifeanyi Bob Ekechukwu March 5, 2014 at 4:50 AM Thanks dear I hope the crisis in your country isn't affecting you. Wishing you the beSt of the day!

Roger Horsch March 4, 2014 at 9:42 AM I could see the sun shimmering in my minds eye. Your descriptive writing is wonderful. You did a very good job.......Hugs.......Roger

Sara Kendrick March 3, 2014 at 6:23 AM Very descriptive work..I can see the scene..Enjoyed reading this morning..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara

Robert Pettit March 2, 2014 at 7:50 PM Your poem shimmers resplendently on this site. Good job.

Scott Thirtyseven March 2, 2014 at 3:54 PM Fantastic, I've got a smile. Thank you.

Andrea Dietrich March 1, 2014 at 7:26 PM Leonora, it has a very happy feeling for it shines with hope!! You are using some near rhymes in here and usually triolet are 8 syllables a line. But I suppose a modern triolet can use as many syllables per line as wanted! good job.

Anne-Lise Andresen March 1, 2014 at 8:49 AM - A beautifully written poem, I dance a sun dance with you, my dear friend Leonora. - Have a great weekend. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Saanvi Dua March 1, 2014 at 8:37 AM Sweet !! Beautifully penned down , Leonara ...... Beautifully describes the atmosphere of ' Sun Dancing ' ... Lots of love and keep writing ... Saanvi :))

Tiaua M Ioane March 1, 2014 at 4:13 AM Very happy vibes coming thru this piece - you must have been sunning in the tropics! feeling the bubbles. Tiaua.

Nette Onclaud March 1, 2014 at 2:43 AM what a radiant piece shimmering like the beat of your sweet soul, lory.. i missed you; hope you are refreshed now after a busy sched.... align with the sun and be well as we have a red alert abou bkk... love and huggs!...

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