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Sun Dancing

The sun shimmers resplendently on a calm sea,
 It synchronizes with the glistening ripples;
Its graceful sways captivated the whole of me,
 The sun shimmers resplendently on a calm sea.
Its fabulous dance completely makes me happy,
Its silver reflection on sea water tickles,
The sun shimmers resplendently on a calm sea,
Cradling my weary soul, giving hope that sparkles.




March 1, 2014   12.30am



 It’s my first try of a triolet poem- 12 syllables per line. I hope I did it right.  HAVE A HAPPY AND BLESSED 1ST DAY OF MARCH 2014. Wish you all the best! Big Hugs!

First Place
Contest: Impress Me with a small poem II
Judged: 3/5/14
Sponsor: Poet Giorgio V.

Copyright © Len Gasun | Year Posted 2014

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Paul Callus Date: 11/12/2015 10:13:00 AM Hi Leonora:) Having a peep at some of your past poems! The repetitive lines of this poem bring out the dance feeling of the sun on the glimmering sea. Still a delight to read. Hugs // paul Login to Reply Len Gasun Date: 11/14/2015 9:09:00 AM Thank you so much my very dear friend, Paul. I appreciate so much your kind visit and unwavering support. More power and blessings! Many hugs from me to you!

Patricia L Graham Date: 3/24/2014 12:38:00 PM So warming and relaxing. Congrats Login to Reply

Poet Destroyer A Date: 3/16/2014 11:56:00 AM How are you doing my wonderful BFF.. Thank you so much for stopping by and enjoying my contest wins. I'm always happy when I see you around. Sending hugs, I hope you have a happy day... See you in a bit, my sis .... Love Linda Login to Reply

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 3/14/2014 6:46:00 PM Ah the negative ions of the sea refresh and gift one with the purity of peace as your poem does. It is lovely Leonora. Thank you for the lovely comment you left for my recent poem. I hope you are well? I keep trying not to catch what my granddaughter comes down with. I just got over bronchitis (cold/flu). So great to be back reading poetry again. Blessings Login to Reply

Bukang Liwayway Date: 3/7/2014 8:48:00 AM this will happen on my grand vacation soon ;) An awesome piece from my dear friend. Congratulations on your win. mwuah!!!!!!!!!!!!! Login to Reply

S.Jagathsimhan Nair Date: 3/7/2014 1:51:00 AM Happy to read you. Congrats, leon!! Login to Reply

Poet Destroyer A Date: 3/6/2014 11:53:00 PM A sweet and beautiful poem Leonora, adoring every line. Calm, filled with tranquility. You are a true sparkle.... Leo, my sis and BFF.... Miss you, and it feels good to be back.. Glad I got to text you all the time... However, I did miss reading and commenting your poems... :) love you..Linda Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 3/6/2014 8:16:00 PM Congrats on your win with this wonderful poem, sweetie!! Login to Reply

Paul Callus Date: 3/6/2014 3:11:00 PM sun's splendor ... and writer's descriptive powers.//congrats on your win.//paul Login to Reply

Abdulhafeez Oyewole Date: 3/5/2014 1:03:00 PM Beautifullly written! Congrats on the win!!! Login to Reply

Roger Horsch Date: 3/5/2014 7:55:00 AM Hi Leonora, I had to say congrats on this wonderful win......Hugs.....Roger Login to Reply

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 3/5/2014 7:17:00 AM - My friend Leonora, congratulations on your lovely winning poem in Giorgio A.V. contest ! - oxox // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply

Monterey Sirak Date: 3/5/2014 6:52:00 AM Lovely and soothing. congrats on your win Login to Reply

Kayod5 Kayode Date: 3/5/2014 6:20:00 AM Congrats on the worthy win Leonora. Login to Reply

Dr.Ram Mehta Date: 3/5/2014 5:12:00 AM Lovely poem. Congratulations on the fine win, leo Login to Reply

Ifeanyi Bob Ekechukwu Date: 3/5/2014 4:50:00 AM Thanks dear I hope the crisis in your country isn't affecting you. Wishing you the beSt of the day! Login to Reply

Roger Horsch Date: 3/4/2014 9:42:00 AM I could see the sun shimmering in my minds eye. Your descriptive writing is wonderful. You did a very good job.......Hugs.......Roger Login to Reply

Sara Kendrick Date: 3/3/2014 6:23:00 AM Very descriptive work..I can see the scene..Enjoyed reading this morning..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara Login to Reply

Robert Pettit Date: 3/2/2014 7:50:00 PM Your poem shimmers resplendently on this site. Good job. Login to Reply

Scott Thirtyseven Date: 3/2/2014 3:54:00 PM Fantastic, I've got a smile. Thank you. Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 3/1/2014 7:26:00 PM Leonora, it has a very happy feeling for it shines with hope!! You are using some near rhymes in here and usually triolet are 8 syllables a line. But I suppose a modern triolet can use as many syllables per line as wanted! good job. Login to Reply

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 3/1/2014 8:49:00 AM - A beautifully written poem, I dance a sun dance with you, my dear friend Leonora. - Have a great weekend. - oxox // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply

Saanvi Dua Date: 3/1/2014 8:37:00 AM Sweet !! Beautifully penned down , Leonara ...... Beautifully describes the atmosphere of ' Sun Dancing ' ... Lots of love and keep writing ... Saanvi :)) Login to Reply

Tiaua M Ioane Date: 3/1/2014 4:13:00 AM Very happy vibes coming thru this piece - you must have been sunning in the tropics! feeling the bubbles. Tiaua. Login to Reply

Nette Onclaud Date: 3/1/2014 2:43:00 AM what a radiant piece shimmering like the beat of your sweet soul, lory.. i missed you; hope you are refreshed now after a busy sched.... align with the sun and be well as we have a red alert abou bkk... love and huggs!... Login to Reply

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