Sun and Sand Minichu

Blinded by shining shards of sunlight
reflecting off sandy summer shores,
give pause to wonder what unworldly sight
hides beneath ocean’s watertight doors.

The Sun, father of the shoreline
instructs his lazy children to light the way
for beach combers and bathers-in-the-brine
who worship the Sun and sand as play.

Burned flesh and scorched, fire-red eyes
accost non-believers shaking their heads,
bemused that the Sun’s brilliance belies 
affair extraordinaire with the sand he beds.

The Sun and sand a reflective twosome
combining their charms and beckoning
unsuspecting lovers to a garishly gruesome
show of frivolity and a day of reckoning.

In other words:

Sun and sand, such teasers,
conspire to cruelly tempt and torture tissue –
faux pleasers.

Enthusiasts 
promising romantic issue –
nets cast.

Beach waltz, 
promise anew –
false

Sun and sand, such teasers,
promising romantic issue –
false

Edited 02/05/2021

Copyright © | Year Posted 2021



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Date: 2/3/2021 7:37:00 PM
This happens with me all the time. I have more NA than wins for same reason. Now I run my poem thru ps grammar checker. Spelling mistakes, grammatical errors, not reading rules. Always in hurry. Your comments made me feel,so I am not alone. Many read, few correct mistakes. Now when I find a mistake in anyone's poem I make it a point to correct. Your entry was best. I liked the Idea of poem and then minichu. Take care. Have a blessed day ahead Linda. Love and hugs Rama
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Linda Alice Fowler
Date: 2/4/2021 5:51:00 AM
Hi Rama. You have brightened my day with your kind words. I am my own worst enemy. I worked this poem early in the contest and when I realized Mohan had 33 of his 35 submissions, I entered this poem without checking had I really completed it. I like to write the same poem in a different form from time to time - it's interesting to see how the form changes the poem, or ice versa. Sincere love and hugs back to you, Linda
Date: 2/3/2021 10:31:00 AM
This is a great write. Did you check rhymes at rhyme zone.?
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Linda Alice Fowler
Date: 2/3/2021 4:57:00 PM
Hi Rama. No, I was in a hurry and didn't check... It's obvious the Minichu portion doesn't rhyme, even without checking. My fault totally. Thanks for the nice comments. :) Linda
Date: 2/3/2021 7:46:00 AM
Enjoyed reading your Sun And Sand Minichu. I agree that sometimes our expectations of a lovely beach experience doesn't work out. Thanks for dropping by my page. I don't know if you placed or not for there are no comments here now ..Mine is the first one and I haven't looked at the winners' list. Sara
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Linda Alice Fowler
Date: 2/3/2021 4:50:00 PM
No placement here Sara. I messed up my rhymes in the Minichu portion. Thanks for visiting me. :) Linda
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