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Sun and Sand Minichu

sun shining-toes in sand

a heavenly day filled with much fun-food and love

I  feel grand

 

 

the cool water

flowing feels great against the sun

hotter

 

 

I play

had so much fun

day

 

 

sun shining-toes in sand

flowing feels great against the sun

day

 

Date Written: 1/5/2021

Honorable Mention win for this contest.
Sun and sand Minichu Poetry Contest 
Judged: 2/3/2021
Sponsored by: Mohan Chutani

beachdayfoodfunloverhyme

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/5/2021 2:09:00 PM

Congrats on your winner. Way to go. Sara

Paula Goldsmith
Date: 3/8/2021 12:01:00 PM

Thanks, for writing and for your congratulations. It was great to have a win in this fun contest. Enjoy your day with blessings.................

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 2/3/2021 7:07:00 AM

Congratulations on the win Paula! Linda

Paula Goldsmith
Date: 2/3/2021 8:00:00 AM

Thank You, for writing and for your congratulations. It was great to have a win. Enjoy your day with blessings.................

Rama Balasubramanian

Date: 2/3/2021 3:48:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. I felt I was in beach as I read this. I felt cold water, hot sun and had fun. Great write.

Paula Goldsmith
Date: 2/3/2021 6:47:00 AM

Thank You, for writing and for your congratulations. It was great to have a win. Glad you like this fun beach write. Glad you were able to join me on the beach. Enjoy your day with blessings.................

Mohan Chutani

Date: 2/3/2021 3:48:00 AM

Paula, Thanks for participating in my contest. All good with your Minichu except the alignment of rhyme of middle line of the first stanza with other two. Not sure if love rhymes well with sun and fun. Still, congrats for your placement in my contest. Best. Mohan

Paula Goldsmith
Date: 2/3/2021 6:44:00 AM

Thank You, for your writing and for your congratulations. It was great to have a win in your contest. Glad you like this fun write. Sorry about the word Love. Many times I have a couple of rough copies. Guess I picked the wrong one. Enjoy your day with blessings.................

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 1/9/2021 2:45:00 PM

I can feel the sand in between my toes and the shock of cold water as I read this one. Feel joyful now.

Paula Goldsmith
Date: 1/10/2021 7:59:00 AM

Thank You, for your note. Glad you like this one. Let's run off to the the beach and put our toes in the sand????? Have wonderful day with blessings.................

Joanna Daniel

Date: 1/7/2021 6:25:00 AM

Wonderful job here, Paula:)

Paula Goldsmith
Date: 1/7/2021 6:59:00 AM

Thank You, for your note. Glad you like this write. Have wonderful day with blessings.................

Beryl Edmonds

Date: 1/5/2021 4:29:00 PM

It’s a lovely way to spend a day, on the beach with toes in sand, wonderful... Belle

Paula Goldsmith
Date: 1/6/2021 8:32:00 AM

Thanks for your note. Glad you like it. Oh yes, the beach with toes in the sand and water. I miss it. Have wonderful day with blessings.................