Summer Takes a Tea Break

Torching of air paused Summer takes sips of mint tea Whispers of autumn

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Susan Ashley

Date: 9/18/2017 7:22:00 PM

Hi Bernard, the cooling quality of mint cooling off summer and the hint of cool crisp autumn to come... An awesome haiku. I love it! It's more taste and feel than visual which is really cool! (No pun intended lol!) Enjoyed!!

Susan Ashley
Date: 9/19/2017 10:48:00 AM

Yes, I need to work on conveying with other senses more myself other than visual, and I see that you did that so fantastically!

Bernard Chan
Date: 9/18/2017 11:48:00 PM

Yeah, I guess this is more about conveying sensations than painting a picture. Thank you for your kind and insightful comments, Susan!! Much appreciated, as always :)

Curtis Johnson

Date: 9/16/2017 2:32:00 AM

I love this.

Bernard Chan
Date: 9/16/2017 5:03:00 AM

Thank you, Curtis.