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Summer Sunset

Huge tangerine clouds drift as the sun fades, I watch gulls dip and dive on thermals high; Frantic wings beat fast when the flock cascades. huge tangerine clouds drift as the sun fades such gorgeous hues of subtle orange shades, Swift ebon shadows flit across the sky. huge tangerine clouds drift as the sun fades, I watch gulls dip and dive on thermals high. Frantic wings beat fast when the flock cascades huge tangerine clouds drift as the sun fades such gorgeous hues of subtle orange shades. Swift ebon shadows flit across the sky I watch gulls dip and dive on thermals high they squawk so loudly as they’re flying by 10 syllables per line checked with How Many Syllables WRITE A "TRIONET" FOR ME Poetry Contest Sponsored by L Milton Hankins 07/01/21

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njv Tomcatx

Date: 8/18/2021 10:07:00 AM

Lovely poem & good use of "huge tangerine clouds" refrain

Smita Kulkarni

Date: 7/7/2021 1:32:00 PM

Beautiful lines penned on a summer sunset! Loved reading it!

Sam Kauffman

Date: 7/7/2021 9:52:00 AM

Jan, congratulations on this lovely trionet! It is like all the shades of a creamsicle - soft and alluring! Well done dear friend... tangerine hugs at twilight!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/7/2021 11:14:00 AM

Thanks Sam we have some amazing sun rises and sunsets to inspire me work:-) hugs jan xx

D.W. Rodgers

Date: 7/6/2021 5:43:00 AM

Congrats on your well deserved win. Your vivid imagery and steady meter evoke the sunset we all seek.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/6/2021 5:49:00 AM

Thanks DW we get some marvelous sunsets and sunrises on our Island:-) hugs jan xx

Bj Legros Kelley

Date: 7/5/2021 2:05:00 AM

Oh, this is beautiful Jan. I miss the ocean and the gulls. I just want to go back to my old hometown near the bay. This is a very picturesque poem, full of motion and sound. Very well done!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/6/2021 5:49:00 AM

Thanks so much BJ:-) hugs jan xx

Beryl Edmonds

Date: 7/2/2021 8:36:00 PM

Wonderful poetry Jan, a summer sunset described beautifully. Congratulations on your win in the contest… Belle xx

Jan Allison
Date: 7/6/2021 5:48:00 AM

Thanks Belle i dislike writing both triolet and sonnet forms so I am delighted to place in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

L Milton Hankins

Date: 7/2/2021 8:33:00 AM

Beautiful writing, Jan. Even though it was a late entry, it rose quickly to a high spot in my contest. Congratulations!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/2/2021 9:33:00 AM

I'm so delighted Milton you have made my day, many thanks for my lovely placement in the contest:-) hugs jan xx

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 7/2/2021 12:54:00 AM

You excel with this sonnet portraying summer. Great imagery and peaceful environment. Hugs xxoo

Jan Allison
Date: 7/2/2021 5:18:00 AM

Thanks Victor I am not a triolet form but this actually made the poem easier to write with the repeated lines. I do struggle writing sonnets!:-) hugs Jan xx

Joanna Daniel

Date: 7/1/2021 11:06:00 PM

Ah! A wonderful picture you paint with your charming words, Jan:)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/2/2021 5:17:00 AM

Thanks Jo:-) hugs Jan xx

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 7/1/2021 11:04:00 PM

Hello Jan … nicely written and described. I’ve rarely seen a similar sunrise, so I do enjoy their different hues and the silhouettes of birds heading home - thank you Jan - Lindsay

Jan Allison
Date: 7/2/2021 5:15:00 AM

we have some spectacular sunsets here Lindsay:-) hugs Jan xx

Heidi Sands

Date: 7/1/2021 3:20:00 PM

Beautiful and peaceful too Jan! I enjoyed this :)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/1/2021 3:34:00 PM

Thanks Heidi:-) hugs jan xx

Tom Cunningham

Date: 7/1/2021 3:12:00 PM

You captured the sunset well in your verse Jan with beautiful imagery, I bet you see some spectacular ones where you are. Tom

Jan Allison
Date: 7/1/2021 3:15:00 PM

the sunsets can be absolutely amazing i have a pic hubby took of a stunning sunset its on my desktop:-) hugs Jan xx Peel, a place in the west of the Island is known as Sunset City:-)