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Summer Rain

dark clouds gather round
collide in the sky~
igniting fireworks

wisps of rain dripping
dry land sucks greedy~
belch of steam rises

plants stand in despair
like children in bath~
not allowed to splash


Up to You Poetry Contest
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Copyright © Valsa George | Year Posted 2021

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Sara Kendrick Date: 6/9/2023 2:39:00 PM Congratulations on this winning work. Way to go. These are excellent very unique. Thanks for sharing them with us and for dropping by my page. Sara Login to Reply

Heidi Sands Date: 2/11/2023 12:51:00 PM Congratulations for your win :) Login to Reply

Linda Alice Fowler Date: 2/11/2023 9:13:00 AM I like the second verse Valsa...the rains in the Texas summer heat belch steam from everything! Congratulations on your win! :) Login to Reply

Kim Rodrigues Date: 12/1/2021 6:21:00 PM Oh I love that last verse! Gets the point across! Login to Reply

Silpika Kalita Date: 11/25/2021 3:24:00 PM A very profound message through those much felt metaphors, insightful Valsa which I love the most about this haiku. Login to Reply Valsa George Date: 11/25/2021 9:13:00 PM I feel enthused ! Thanks a lot dear poet friend !

Victor Buhagiar Date: 11/23/2021 11:00:00 PM Great imagery, Valsa. And very pleasing. ~~ Login to Reply Valsa George Date: 11/24/2021 3:29:00 AM Thank you very much Victor for your generous encouragement !

Gershon Wolf Date: 11/23/2021 1:41:00 PM 'Planets like children in a bath' has me smiling, Valsa. Since I don't see 'Soup Mail' at the top of your site, I just want to mention that I think -- I could be wrong -- that you might want to reverse the first two words in the last line of this poem: i.e., 'Not allowed to splash.' Thanks for reading, and G.L. in the contest! Cheers, Gershon Login to Reply Valsa George Date: 11/24/2021 3:28:00 AM That's a very good suggestion ! I shall change it that way ! I think I can still edit it ! Thanks a lot Gershon ! :) :)

Evelyn Judy Buehler Date: 11/23/2021 1:15:00 PM The imagery is delightfully vivid in this beautiful haiku string. :) Evelyn Login to Reply Valsa George Date: 11/24/2021 3:21:00 AM Thanks a lot Evelyn for your uplifting feed back !

Rico Leffanta Date: 11/23/2021 10:52:00 AM God must have been in a rush as if rain is preceeded by sprinkles, it can sink into and nourish the earth instead of washing everything away . . . . .Enjoyed! Login to Reply Valsa George Date: 11/24/2021 3:20:00 AM Summer rains are mostly drizzles and the dry Earth and plants don't get enough to quench their thirst! But when it rains, it rains cats and dogs! There is no moderation....! God seems to be too much in a rush to plan things meticulously.... Thank you Rico

Arturo Michael Date: 11/23/2021 10:26:00 AM A threesome Haiku...Well put together...soaking into the earth Login to Reply Valsa George Date: 11/24/2021 3:15:00 AM Very many thanks for our your stopping at my page and the encouraging response

Jan Allison Date: 11/23/2021 6:10:00 AM Very descriptive, I especially like the first poem, hugs jan xx Login to Reply Valsa George Date: 11/24/2021 3:14:00 AM Thank you so much Jan for your kind visit and sincere appraisal of my poem