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Summer Rain

dark clouds gather round collide in the sky~ igniting fireworks wisps of rain dripping dry land sucks greedy~ belch of steam rises plants stand in despair like children in bath~ not allowed to splash Up to You Poetry Contest Sponsor- Brian Strand

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Date: 6/9/2023 2:39:00 PM
Congratulations on this winning work. Way to go. These are excellent very unique. Thanks for sharing them with us and for dropping by my page. Sara
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Date: 2/11/2023 12:51:00 PM
Congratulations for your win :)
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Date: 2/11/2023 9:13:00 AM
I like the second verse Valsa...the rains in the Texas summer heat belch steam from everything! Congratulations on your win! :)
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Date: 12/1/2021 6:21:00 PM
Oh I love that last verse! Gets the point across!
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Date: 11/25/2021 3:24:00 PM
A very profound message through those much felt metaphors, insightful Valsa which I love the most about this haiku.
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Valsa George
Date: 11/25/2021 9:13:00 PM
I feel enthused ! Thanks a lot dear poet friend !
Date: 11/23/2021 11:00:00 PM
Great imagery, Valsa. And very pleasing. ~~
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Date: 11/24/2021 3:29:00 AM
Thank you very much Victor for your generous encouragement !
Date: 11/23/2021 1:41:00 PM
'Planets like children in a bath' has me smiling, Valsa. Since I don't see 'Soup Mail' at the top of your site, I just want to mention that I think -- I could be wrong -- that you might want to reverse the first two words in the last line of this poem: i.e., 'Not allowed to splash.' Thanks for reading, and G.L. in the contest! Cheers, Gershon
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Valsa George
Date: 11/24/2021 3:28:00 AM
That's a very good suggestion ! I shall change it that way ! I think I can still edit it ! Thanks a lot Gershon ! :) :)
Date: 11/23/2021 1:15:00 PM
The imagery is delightfully vivid in this beautiful haiku string. :) Evelyn
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Date: 11/24/2021 3:21:00 AM
Thanks a lot Evelyn for your uplifting feed back !
Date: 11/23/2021 10:52:00 AM
God must have been in a rush as if rain is preceeded by sprinkles, it can sink into and nourish the earth instead of washing everything away . . . . .Enjoyed!
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Valsa George
Date: 11/24/2021 3:20:00 AM
Summer rains are mostly drizzles and the dry Earth and plants don't get enough to quench their thirst! But when it rains, it rains cats and dogs! There is no moderation....! God seems to be too much in a rush to plan things meticulously.... Thank you Rico
Date: 11/23/2021 10:26:00 AM
A threesome Haiku...Well put together...soaking into the earth
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Valsa George
Date: 11/24/2021 3:15:00 AM
Very many thanks for our your stopping at my page and the encouraging response
Date: 11/23/2021 6:10:00 AM
Very descriptive, I especially like the first poem, hugs jan xx
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Valsa George
Date: 11/24/2021 3:14:00 AM
Thank you so much Jan for your kind visit and sincere appraisal of my poem

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