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Summer Rain

dark clouds gather round
collide in the sky~
igniting fireworks

wisps of rain dripping
dry land sucks greedy~
belch of steam rises

plants stand in despair
like children in bath~
not allowed to splash


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Sara Kendrick

June 9, 2023 at 2:39 PM

Congratulations on this winning work. Way to go. These are excellent very unique. Thanks for sharing them with us and for dropping by my page. Sara

Heidi Sands

February 11, 2023 at 12:51 PM

Congratulations for your win :)

Linda Alice Fowler

February 11, 2023 at 9:13 AM

I like the second verse Valsa...the rains in the Texas summer heat belch steam from everything! Congratulations on your win! :)

Kim Rodrigues

December 1, 2021 at 6:21 PM

Oh I love that last verse! Gets the point across!

Silpika Kalita

November 25, 2021 at 3:24 PM

A very profound message through those much felt metaphors, insightful Valsa which I love the most about this haiku.

Valsa George

November 25, 2021 at 9:13 PM

I feel enthused ! Thanks a lot dear poet friend !

Victor Buhagiar

November 23, 2021 at 11:00 PM

Great imagery, Valsa. And very pleasing. ~~

Valsa George

November 24, 2021 at 3:29 AM

Thank you very much Victor for your generous encouragement !

Gershon Wolf

November 23, 2021 at 1:41 PM

'Planets like children in a bath' has me smiling, Valsa. Since I don't see 'Soup Mail' at the top of your site, I just want to mention that I think -- I could be wrong -- that you might want to reverse the first two words in the last line of this poem: i.e., 'Not allowed to splash.' Thanks for reading, and G.L. in the contest! Cheers, Gershon

Valsa George

November 24, 2021 at 3:28 AM

That's a very good suggestion ! I shall change it that way ! I think I can still edit it ! Thanks a lot Gershon ! :) :)

Evelyn Judy Buehler

November 23, 2021 at 1:15 PM

The imagery is delightfully vivid in this beautiful haiku string. :) Evelyn

Valsa George

November 24, 2021 at 3:21 AM

Thanks a lot Evelyn for your uplifting feed back !

Rico Leffanta

November 23, 2021 at 10:52 AM

God must have been in a rush as if rain is preceeded by sprinkles, it can sink into and nourish the earth instead of washing everything away . . . . .Enjoyed!

Valsa George

November 24, 2021 at 3:20 AM

Summer rains are mostly drizzles and the dry Earth and plants don't get enough to quench their thirst! But when it rains, it rains cats and dogs! There is no moderation....! God seems to be too much in a rush to plan things meticulously.... Thank you Rico