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Poetic Form: Italian Sonnet

Inspired: 2024 August 25

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A drop of summer, pleasing--over there
I thought it wanted me, no want of ground 
but want of me, instead a pleasant sound
of birds merging and darting thoroughfare
seemingly clueless of their doing-dare
o'er crowds busy about, looking spellbound
course to escape amiss ahead turned round
to freedom with the banners released to air.

In the opened venues queues roundabout
every which way as the buying frenzy
curtailed from end to pass the noontime lunch
crowd slowing and going but caterers doubt 
that the dinner crowd will be as lengthy
till gathering increased, gave them a hunch.

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Reason A. Poteet Date: 9/5/2024 7:31:00 AM The apostle Paul was noted for the periodic sentence in his writings. Your sonnet here reminds me of that literary "device". This is one of your best Italian sonnets of those I have read. I can imagine you were sitting, waiting for someone to get through shopping so you could have a bite yourselves. Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 9/5/2024 9:03:00 AM Yes, my kids going after their smaller ones while the older ones are checking out the local variety of equal age at this very vibrant shops and open vendors market area outskirts of San Jose and I'm enjoying a Costa Rican summer show in anticipation of loved ones return. Aloha William

Kim Rodrigues Date: 8/25/2024 5:53:00 PM instead a pleasant sound of birds merging and darting thoroughfare seemingly clueless of their doing-dare…Aloha, dear William! Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 8/26/2024 12:50:00 AM Dear Kim, I'm describing some sort of a open market kids found leaving me at the usual "be back pops," drop-off. Babies too fast, and kids can't keep up wit'em if the potential bird watcher is tugging "summer's/family" coat-tails--the making of a solid sonnet. Aloha Kim