Sullen Moon

Gail Doyle Contest Name A Tropical Theme Under The Moonlight A sullen Moon excludes the gloom, The red sun slowly drops, From ship to shore, I’ve swam miles an more, She’s sinking on the rocks, Nothing to eat, the sun aint sweet, My thirst is burning till, A coconut, comes a rolling down, Perhaps I’ll drink, I will? The rock does crack, I just went wack, To drink and eat my fill, No others lived, voiced we forgive, Alone at last, until? Don Johnson 13/03/2012

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012



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Date: 3/19/2012 7:04:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in Gail's "Tropical Theme" contest Don. Love, Carol
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Date: 3/17/2012 8:26:00 AM
Enjoyed the humour here Don,Congrats on your win.
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Date: 3/16/2012 8:00:00 PM
congrats DON on a fab win for this tropical treasure luv.. an amazing adventure .. a lovely getaway..
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Date: 3/16/2012 6:00:00 PM
LOL always the joker..Congrad's on your win! Light & Love
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Date: 3/16/2012 12:33:00 PM
This was a different take on the contest. I like it, Don. Congrats on your win! Love, Kim
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Date: 3/16/2012 10:34:00 AM
A great write Don, love it congratulations xx
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Date: 3/13/2012 4:45:00 PM
Ha ha, ah this write is very cleverly written Don! I just love the line, "Alone at last, until?" that just extends your poem beyond what is confined within your write, magnificently done I must say! I really enjoyed your descriptions of the sun and it's setting into the rocks, excellent! I love your write that you have written! Great Work!!
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Date: 3/13/2012 4:30:00 AM
Such a wonderful write for the contest a sure winner. Could almost sing this one.
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