Suicide Note - a Prose -

The razor blade held to his wrist shows pain, 
mourning, and anything else. 
You see, he just wants someone to understand him,
care for him, and love him as their own.
His mother and father argue over the tiniest things.
 
Cut one starts, he doesn't feel the relief yet.
Peers and students tease him for being bubbly and happy. 
But no one has seen this dark and twisted part of his mind.
 
Cut two stings just a bit, a sting from a wasp. 
His friends don’t care, they have their own mediocre lives to deal with.
 
Cut number three murders the emotional pain.
No one cares that he does this.
Everyone presses on in their own lives,
paying taxes and making love.

He grabs his father’s pistol from under his parents’ bed.
He writes this letter, and then pulls the trigger.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013

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November 6, 2013 at 8:19 PM
Nice win.... Love SKAT
As Avatar
November 2, 2013 at 6:38 AM
I super like this one
Burgess Avatar
November 1, 2013 at 8:00 AM
Congratulations! This poem gave me a heavy feeling in my chest, it really brough out emotion. Great work xx
Tams The Golden Girl Avatar
November 1, 2013 at 7:34 AM
powerful but sad cuts deep into memories . congratulations on your win Christian xx
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October 31, 2013 at 12:20 PM
Congrats on your winning work ...Sara
Adams Avatar
October 30, 2013 at 8:09 PM
wow....very powerful write...i have know a few such as this...sad when it come to this point....congrats on your win :)
Rain Avatar
October 30, 2013 at 1:18 PM
This is very well done , and I hope it is fictional , the truth is ..we all know someone whom has done this, I think you have deserved this win !
Andresen Avatar
October 30, 2013 at 4:42 AM
- Congratulations on your winning poem, Christian! - Pleased to read good poetry .... Really well written! - Thank you. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
Gopela Avatar
October 30, 2013 at 2:59 AM
Wow! I remembered someone special. Someone who did the same thing. Who felt unloved and unworthy. If we still have all the time in the world to share the joy, love and care to others, just do it! Sometimes, people tend to end their lives if they feel worthless and that's a crucial part of human nature. I so love this! Congrats, Christian! More power! Love,love,love! :-) - Den
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October 29, 2013 at 9:11 PM
wow Christian, I am so happy to see you on the number one spot.... congratulations.... LINDA
Ligon Avatar
October 29, 2013 at 8:29 PM
So sad. Never a good reason for someone to end their life. Things can always change and God always cares, even when circumstances are continually rough and a person doesn't feel his presence. Very emotional read. Congratulations on your win!
Anglesey Avatar
October 29, 2013 at 8:19 PM
A very sad look at this kind of emotional pain. Very fitting subject for the contest. Congrats on the win :)
Aid Avatar
August 17, 2013 at 2:41 PM
Nice work...brave because it's relatable.
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August 7, 2013 at 11:15 PM
please read the "About Poem"!
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