Subdued, In Writing

Enveloped in waves of
overflowing thought
to drown within its current
light goes dim, cannot see
what is in front
what is behind I?
For in a trap, 
cannot focus 
cannot breath.
Gasping crying to 
what cannot hear.
It has ensnared, in its icy 
teeth. 
Thought oppressed 
ink splattered statements along 
piles of morose.
Cold 
as he froze 
the final essence of me.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018



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Date: 1/30/2018 12:25:00 PM
Your note is very true and your poem flows wonderfully. Stay strong Sydney ;)
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Date: 1/28/2018 11:54:00 PM
Your writing is beautiful Sydney, and don't let anyone tell you differently. I have written a few poems on Child bullying, perhaps you would like to read them when you get a chance....Starry Starry Night and Hallelujah. Welcome to Poetry Soup....Maria
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Date: 1/25/2018 6:30:00 PM
Hi Sydney I think many can relate to your lines and poets notes. In the past I've been bullied, criticised and put down over my poetry style but I won't let these people let me down and I definitely wont give up having such fun writing:-) I see you are new on the site and extend a warm welcome to soup :-) hugs Jan xx
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