Stupor

clouded by careless bravado i say too much this good night clouds have gone and I am in the spotlight of moon shine loose lips break the silence but no one hears the confession of a fool intoxicated under the influence of you

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Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 4/1/2011 9:07:00 AM

Breathless and breathtaking expression of one in luv.. Hai.. it is a joy to read your lines and absorb their meaning luv.. hope u enjoy a happy weekend with luv..

Royal Trevino

Date: 9/20/2010 11:27:00 AM

Nice, "intoxicated" love the last stanza, enjoyed your write, =(^.^)=Royal

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 9/11/2010 6:33:00 PM

SOUNDS LIKE A DREAMY NIGHT! oh by the way...I worked on lion's den see if it makes sense.

Kristi Hayner

Date: 9/9/2010 6:13:00 AM

Don't you just love being "under the influence"? Thanks for writing and sharing, Hai Au Chu.

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 9/8/2010 12:30:00 AM

Enjoyed your take on "stupor" with this write of yours-- made me smile--clever play on moonshine and intoxicate over here as well... just a typo for "bravado"-- hope this helps-- I sure am enjoying reading your poems :) -- nikko :)

Amy Green

Date: 3/16/2010 10:29:00 AM

Yes... All I can write.

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 3/3/2010 3:42:00 PM

How romantic! Great use of imagery too, Hai. Enjoyed reading your poem. Love, Carolyn

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/2/2010 12:27:00 PM

VEry interesting and enjoyable little free verse poem, (Hai, is it?) I hope to see more from you! andrea

Susan Palli

Date: 3/2/2010 4:16:00 AM

Loved it!

Yoni Dvorkis

Date: 2/28/2010 6:15:00 PM

Sounds like moon shine isn't the only drug the subject is on. For me the last line hints at a memory of someone else that led to the intoxication in the first place. I like the tone and delivery. I'll have to imagine what his confession may be. thanks for sharing. Yoni

Margaret Foster

Date: 2/27/2010 7:09:00 PM

I like the careless bravado and the intoxication by another. Good imagery of someone infatuated perhaps. well written Hai . thank you for reading and commenting on my 'Chill out" I am pleased it made you smile, can't take life to seriously all the time :) cheers Margaret

Nick Bagnall

Date: 2/26/2010 5:09:00 AM

Lovely - made me smile - thanks