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Carved from tree. Perfect dreamy face, sadness not a trace. A wood carver dreams of having child. A spirit wistful running wild. A hand to hold, a mouth that smiles. He sits there thinking for a while. Each piece of wood he cuts away, one step further from that day. Strings attached to arms head and back, the image perfect only a soul he lacks. He looks at his puppet and sheds a tear, if only he had a real boy here. No Fairy Godmother to hear his plea. A dream unfullfilled will never be. A carved puppet with little button nose, perfectly formed fingers and little toes. He looks at the puppet hangs him high. Takes a deep breath wipes his eyes. All his hopes cut away with a knife. Cancer took the dream from him and his wife. Debbie Guzzi's Dream On Contest July 24th, 2013

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Date: 8/11/2013 4:20:00 PM
Very sad strings attached to this one Rick but a beautiful write all the same. Congratulations on the win. Take care, Richard
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Date: 8/10/2013 12:35:00 PM
A popular grand unified theory, exclusively to people who love poetry. Nice reading. Love this creation.
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Date: 8/6/2013 2:32:00 PM
this is just wonderful. Glad I took the time to see how you did yours, Richard. Congrats for your win.
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Date: 8/6/2013 9:46:00 AM
a nice win Richard :-) Congrats... love ~SKAT~
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Date: 8/5/2013 7:50:00 PM
Richard, Congratulations, In DG's "Dream On" contest... have yourself a nice one...Linda
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Date: 8/5/2013 6:34:00 PM
Thanks so much a very polished verse, you worked on it and it shows! Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
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Date: 7/30/2013 5:09:00 AM
You have the mastery, pen on.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/30/2013 6:50:00 AM
Thanks Gerald, I believe this is our first intro suction. Thanks for stopping to read and comment.
Date: 7/26/2013 12:09:00 PM
Goodness, I have REAAAAAALLY missed reading your work, Rick! I love the rhythm of this poem, and especially the lines- "He looks at his puppet and sheds a tear, if only he had a real boy here."-- AWESOME lines!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/26/2013 11:39:00 PM
Tjanks for all your visits it really made my day.
Date: 7/26/2013 8:06:00 AM
This is beautiful Richard, but it made me cry. great for the contest. Thanks for sharing...... Lucilla
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/26/2013 8:58:00 AM
Hi Lucilla, sorry to make you cry. Thanks for commenting.
Date: 7/26/2013 6:45:00 AM
This is very touchy. the 3rd verse is the nerve of the whole the theme. well penned .Thank you for your inspiration on my poems.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/26/2013 7:32:00 AM
My pleasure Manel
Date: 7/25/2013 6:49:00 PM
Awwww, this is beautiful, Richard. I can relate to this since we also had problems. 7 years later twins popped up out the blue. Wonderful write, my friend. FFFFAAAAVVVVVEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/25/2013 7:00:00 PM
Thanks Licia, it appears dreams do come true. I am happy for you. Thanks for adding to our favorites.
Date: 7/25/2013 1:56:00 PM
I love the .only a soul he lacks. you added Richard....to add depth to this picture....nice...
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/25/2013 7:01:00 PM
I'm glad you like the changes.
Date: 7/25/2013 11:57:00 AM
Poignant, a story of such a feeling that real heart will certainly feel. Expression is extremely nice. Loved always, bl
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/25/2013 7:02:00 PM
Thanks bl, that is a very nice thing to say.
Date: 7/25/2013 9:23:00 AM
Much better Richard now list your form as rhyme! Thanks for the heads up on the extra A after father! [I completely didn't see it!] Light & Love
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/25/2013 9:26:00 AM
Thanks Debbie, I will change the form.
Date: 7/25/2013 8:03:00 AM
Absolutely magical with a very moving conclusion. Wonderful entry for Debbie's contest!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/25/2013 8:45:00 AM
Thanks Heather. I'm glad you like it.
Date: 7/24/2013 8:43:00 PM
A tear jerker....great write & creative twist, really enjoyed reading...thankyou for sharing, richard:0) cherie...
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/24/2013 8:52:00 PM
Hi Cherie, thanks so much for your positive comment.
Date: 7/24/2013 4:00:00 PM
:( How sad....too bad that it can't have a happy ending like the real story! :( Great write, Richard....this was moving...and the Title...captivating. Good night from my part of the world. One minute to 1:00am..... :)
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/24/2013 9:20:00 PM
Will you share it with me?
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/24/2013 7:57:00 PM
Good night Eileen, the happy part is he does have his wife. Sorry for the sad part. I kept a copy of my original version with the happy ending.
Date: 7/24/2013 3:00:00 PM
Yup. You added the icing to your already beautiful cake. The only strings being pulled now: Heartstrings.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/24/2013 7:58:00 PM
Ha ha ha, a very clever comment Drake;0)
Date: 7/24/2013 10:40:00 AM
I liked it...A very touching write off a childhood movie. Nice...
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/24/2013 10:41:00 AM
Thanks Dan, glad you liked it.
Date: 7/24/2013 10:38:00 AM
an altogether unique track of a character lined with vivid thoughts and unique plot... this is a rhyme, rich... shine on!..:) huggs
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/24/2013 10:39:00 AM
Thanks Nette, Huggs back.
Date: 7/24/2013 9:23:00 AM
I love the first 2 verses because it doesn't have to be Pinocchio, this is fine my friend but I know you can do a better one for me do NOT retell the story of Pinocchio. write more of the longing for a child. Did I make a mistake with the word fathering on the Paul Newman verse? Let me know it's no problem for me to fix it, just write in my comments. L & L
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/24/2013 10:33:00 AM
Thanks Debbie
Date: 7/24/2013 8:51:00 AM
Pinocchio would be so proud of this piece. Unless his nose starts to grow as he says it. =) Excellent job!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/24/2013 9:00:00 AM
Thanks Drake
Date: 7/24/2013 8:33:00 AM
nicely penned .....good luck in the contest
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/24/2013 8:36:00 AM
Thanks Joseph.