Richard Lamoureux Poet Rhyme

Strings Attached

Carved from tree.
Perfect 
dreamy face, sadness not a trace.
A wood carver dreams of having child.
A spirit wistful running wild.

A hand to hold, a mouth that smiles.
He sits there thinking for a while.
Each piece of wood he cuts away,
one step further from that day.

Strings attached to arms head and back,
the image perfect only a soul he lacks.
He looks at his puppet and sheds a tear,
if only he had a real boy here.

No Fairy Godmother to hear his plea.
A dream unfullfilled will never be.
A carved puppet with little button nose,
perfectly formed fingers and little toes.

He looks at the puppet hangs him high.
Takes a deep breath wipes his eyes.
All his hopes cut away with a knife.
Cancer took the dream from him and his wife.



Debbie Guzzi's 
Dream On Contest

July 24th, 2013

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Richard D Seal August 11, 2013 at 4:20 PM Very sad strings attached to this one Rick but a beautiful write all the same. Congratulations on the win. Take care, Richard

Chittaranjan Dey August 10, 2013 at 12:35 PM A popular grand unified theory, exclusively to people who love poetry. Nice reading. Love this creation.

Andrea Dietrich August 6, 2013 at 2:32 PM this is just wonderful. Glad I took the time to see how you did yours, Richard. Congrats for your win.

Skat A August 6, 2013 at 9:46 AM a nice win Richard :-) Congrats... love ~SKAT~

Poet Destroyer A August 5, 2013 at 7:50 PM Richard, Congratulations, In DG's "Dream On" contest... have yourself a nice one...Linda

Debbie Guzzi August 5, 2013 at 6:34 PM Thanks so much a very polished verse, you worked on it and it shows! Congrad's on your win. Light & Love

Gerald Kithinji July 30, 2013 at 5:09 AM You have the mastery, pen on. Richard Lamoureux July 30, 2013 at 6:50 AM Thanks Gerald, I believe this is our first intro suction. Thanks for stopping to read and comment.

Lucilla Carrillo July 26, 2013 at 8:06 AM This is beautiful Richard, but it made me cry. great for the contest. Thanks for sharing...... Lucilla Richard Lamoureux July 26, 2013 at 8:58 AM Hi Lucilla, sorry to make you cry. Thanks for commenting.

Manel Gunatillake July 26, 2013 at 6:45 AM This is very touchy. the 3rd verse is the nerve of the whole the theme. well penned .Thank you for your inspiration on my poems. Richard Lamoureux July 26, 2013 at 7:32 AM My pleasure Manel

Delysia Hendricks July 25, 2013 at 6:49 PM Awwww, this is beautiful, Richard. I can relate to this since we also had problems. 7 years later twins popped up out the blue. Wonderful write, my friend. FFFFAAAAVVVVVEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Richard Lamoureux July 25, 2013 at 7:00 PM Thanks Licia, it appears dreams do come true. I am happy for you. Thanks for adding to our favorites.

Donna Jones July 25, 2013 at 1:56 PM I love the .only a soul he lacks. you added Richard....to add depth to this picture....nice... Richard Lamoureux July 25, 2013 at 7:01 PM I'm glad you like the changes.

Bl Devnath July 25, 2013 at 11:57 AM Poignant, a story of such a feeling that real heart will certainly feel. Expression is extremely nice. Loved always, bl Richard Lamoureux July 25, 2013 at 7:02 PM Thanks bl, that is a very nice thing to say.

Debbie Guzzi July 25, 2013 at 9:23 AM Much better Richard now list your form as rhyme! Thanks for the heads up on the extra A after father! [I completely didn't see it!] Light & Love Richard Lamoureux July 25, 2013 at 9:26 AM Thanks Debbie, I will change the form.

Heather Ober July 25, 2013 at 8:03 AM Absolutely magical with a very moving conclusion. Wonderful entry for Debbie's contest! Richard Lamoureux July 25, 2013 at 8:45 AM Thanks Heather. I'm glad you like it.

Cherie Thomas July 24, 2013 at 8:43 PM A tear jerker....great write & creative twist, really enjoyed reading...thankyou for sharing, richard:0) cherie... Richard Lamoureux July 24, 2013 at 8:52 PM Hi Cherie, thanks so much for your positive comment.

Eileen Manassian July 24, 2013 at 4:00 PM :( How sad....too bad that it can't have a happy ending like the real story! :( Great write, Richard....this was moving...and the Title...captivating. Good night from my part of the world. One minute to 1:00am..... :) Eileen Manassian July 24, 2013 at 9:20 PM Will you share it with me? Richard Lamoureux July 24, 2013 at 7:57 PM Good night Eileen, the happy part is he does have his wife. Sorry for the sad part. I kept a copy of my original version with the happy ending.

Poet Tacito July 24, 2013 at 3:00 PM Yup. You added the icing to your already beautiful cake. The only strings being pulled now: Heartstrings. Richard Lamoureux July 24, 2013 at 7:58 PM Ha ha ha, a very clever comment Drake;0)

Dan Kearley July 24, 2013 at 10:40 AM I liked it...A very touching write off a childhood movie. Nice... Richard Lamoureux July 24, 2013 at 10:41 AM Thanks Dan, glad you liked it.

Nette Onclaud July 24, 2013 at 10:38 AM an altogether unique track of a character lined with vivid thoughts and unique plot... this is a rhyme, rich... shine on!..:) huggs Richard Lamoureux July 24, 2013 at 10:39 AM Thanks Nette, Huggs back.

Debbie Guzzi July 24, 2013 at 9:23 AM I love the first 2 verses because it doesn't have to be Pinocchio, this is fine my friend but I know you can do a better one for me do NOT retell the story of Pinocchio. write more of the longing for a child. Did I make a mistake with the word fathering on the Paul Newman verse? Let me know it's no problem for me to fix it, just write in my comments. L & L Richard Lamoureux July 24, 2013 at 10:33 AM Thanks Debbie

Poet Tacito July 24, 2013 at 8:51 AM Pinocchio would be so proud of this piece. Unless his nose starts to grow as he says it. =) Excellent job! Richard Lamoureux July 24, 2013 at 9:00 AM Thanks Drake

Joseph May July 24, 2013 at 8:33 AM nicely penned .....good luck in the contest Richard Lamoureux July 24, 2013 at 8:36 AM Thanks Joseph.