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Streaking At the Mall

Eddie went to the mall full of ***** He was always real proud of his junk While taking a leak Decided to streak Suzie yelled, “Mommy, he has a trunk”

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Tim Smith

Date: 5/4/2014 3:09:00 PM

Glad I found some of your glorious poems...Tim

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/3/2012 5:18:00 AM

coming back here to tell you this is one of the funniest poems ever! The only little thing that you would need to change to give this perfect meter, would be to change jerome for a name like Tommy, with an accent on the first syllable instead of the last!

Funom Makama

Date: 6/11/2012 5:55:00 AM

This is great... I really enjoyed it. Nice to get such a blessing in such a beautiful monday afternoon.

Terry O'Leary

Date: 6/11/2012 5:08:00 AM

Very funny... & thanks for your kind comments... Terry

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/10/2012 6:14:00 PM

hahaha, that last line is hilarious!!!!

Cyndi Macmillan

Date: 6/7/2012 10:35:00 PM

Hi there chick-a-roonie! Glad to see you returning to the soup. I like your limerick. Now, as far as meter goes, I literally use a dictionary. For me, I'm meter-clueless without one. There are some stellar meter-ologists here. I stumble along. Hope life's good! Cyndi

Gwendolen Song

Date: 6/5/2012 7:15:00 PM

You got some ggggrrrrrrreat feedback on this one! Thanks for stopping over to my place....great to receive comments from u again...I, like Ruben, promise to behave with this limerick! :)

The Situation

Date: 6/4/2012 8:31:00 PM

what can i say??? except it would be funnier if you said mommy. but why am i partisipating with this.!?!? i don't even know how to spell it!!! this chick is too far out there.

Gwendolen Song

Date: 6/4/2012 5:50:00 PM

AHoy amigos Rogue Rhymer...Been wondering where in the world you were just the other day...It's nice to see you back in action...Oh, you heard bout your lovely Richard Dawes who died yesterday from esophageal cancer...I grew up watching The Feud and fantasized what it would be like to take my family on that show.....And the survey says----(memories!) I'll be back to read again very soon. Gwendolen

Gwendolen Song
Date: 6/4/2012 5:51:00 PM

Dawson--oops.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 6/4/2012 3:01:00 PM

Hi, Natalie i just loved your poem it was funny!Today I'm reading poems from my aunt PD's account, hope you don't mind. Sincerely pd's niece SYLVIA!

David Williams

Date: 6/4/2012 3:52:00 AM

great to see you back ....David

Jslambert Mister Roboto

Date: 6/4/2012 3:50:00 AM

YES....J-Rome was HUNG yo! Me. I'm hung like a Bull. a GER- BuLL! Sike, and I got no grey hairs on my head, just in my Goat. That line: "I got more rhymes than I got grey hairs, and that's a lot, cuz I gotz my share" was an O-MAge to my friend Adam who passed last month. (he was a writer, musician)-this poem youve woofed up goes to my Faves and a 7 +

David Williams

Date: 6/4/2012 3:50:00 AM

Natalie, ha ha ha,, ' Jerome at the mall full of spunk, was always so proud of his junk, while taking a leak, decided to streak, Young Paige, AMAZED at his trunk.

Vicky Tsiluma

Date: 6/4/2012 2:33:00 AM

You are crazy - good crazy! And thanks for the head up.

Charles Clive

Date: 6/4/2012 2:20:00 AM

To answer your plea:- He went to the mall full of spunk. He always was proud of his junk. Whilst taking a leak, decided to streak. A little one yelled "What a trunk!" ~ one way to get the meter right is repeat to yourself the old adage:- tit bum titty bum titty bum tit bum titty bum titty bum tit bum titty bum tit bum titty bum tit bum titty bum titty bum! Keep to the syllable count and Bingo - a masterpiece! Charles. Charles Clive.

Charles Clive
Date: 6/5/2012 3:43:00 AM

Thank you for your comment. I shall now await your next Limerick Masterpiece with even keener anticipation! Charles

Charles Clive
Date: 6/4/2012 2:24:00 AM

Sadly this makes a nonsense without the punctuation! It should be: tit bum titty bum titty bum, tit bum titty bum titty bum, tit bum titty bum, tit bum titty bum, tit bum titty bum titty bum! Charles.