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Storm - Haiku

storm surge chisel cuts
sharp brine edge of razor waves -
rock face smooth wet glass


Susan Ashley
August 22, 2017

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Gayle Rodd

Date: 1/4/2018 5:24:00 PM

How can such a short verse contain such beauty? Well done! truly a 7!

Susan Ashley
Date: 1/5/2018 2:54:00 PM

Gayle, your visit and lovely comments truly delight me. Thank you for your kind words of appreciation and for the 7.. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Paul Callus

Date: 12/1/2017 5:02:00 PM

Whatever you had in mind, Susan, I have derived my own picture from these lines: I see giant waves rising upwards, forcibly, against the high cliffs. This same picture can be interpreted metaphorically with reference to a person who stands undaunted by the ups and downs of life. ~ Warm regards // paul

Susan Ashley
Date: 12/1/2017 8:47:00 PM

I do enjoy your dual interpretations, Paul, both are dramatic and wonderful. You, my friend, leave no stone unturned as well. It seems that you have found yourself at a crossroads, something that you are so expert at creating in your own poems and a pleasant destination that I have arrived at many times in reading your intriguing and beautiful poetry. Thank you for your thoughtful musings and your lovely friendship. ~Susan

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/25/2017 5:56:00 PM

I like the SOUND of your words in this one, Susan. Chiseled, indeed!!

Susan Ashley
Date: 8/25/2017 10:42:00 PM

Thank you Andrea! I played with the words for a bit to get just the right hard edginess to them to oppose the smoothness of the last line. I'm glad you noticed the sound of the words in this Haiku. When i was working on this it was like I could hear a chisel on stone too! Much appreciation :)

Arturo Michael

Date: 8/23/2017 7:02:00 AM

Good morning Susan...Very imaginative...Good one...Thanks for sharing...Have a nice day

Susan Ashley
Date: 8/23/2017 8:37:00 PM

Hi Arturo, thank you so very much and it was so nice to see you visit my poem. Much appreciation for you my friend and I hope you have a wonderful evening!

Heidi Sands

Date: 8/22/2017 7:18:00 PM

This is really moving along nicely. I love reading your writing. This is excellent! I enjoyed it :)

Susan Ashley
Date: 8/22/2017 7:32:00 PM

Thank you so much Heidi! Thank you for your heartwarming and greatly encouraging comment. I learn always from your warm comments and I always hope that I am moving forward with my writing. Thank you for helping me move along with your kind words. And the feeling is mutual, I love reading your writing as well, from the very first day I joined PS. Much appreciation :)