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Stirring the Soup

predator from the deep 
 destroyer of amity
  his fin glides toward you
    voracious enemy

peace in soupdom imperiled
 by beast with many names
  his temperament assails
   engaging in mind games

from friend to friend he turns
 spewing hateful lies
  his style so lackluster
   to divide and conquer, he tries

victims selected randomly
 he finds some won’t strike back
  but others band together
   planning a counter-attack

joining hands for defense
 souper strength shines strong
  he flees with jaws debased
   to rue his every wrong




*December 29, 2018.

Copyright © Carolyn Devonshire | Year Posted 2018

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Lindsay Laurie Date: 1/10/2019 5:15:00 PM Hello Carolyn … sharks on the soup. There has been an odd one or two. This is a very clever verse Carolyn - well done - Lindsay Login to Reply

Robert L. Hinshaw Date: 1/8/2019 5:29:00 PM Congrats for your well-deserved First Place for this very creative and witty verse!. Thanks for your gracious comments re Granny's Tattoos. It is a "retool" of an old one I had on the site. There is another titled Tattoo From Kalamazoo you might find even sillier. Take good care - Bob Login to Reply

Vladislav Raven Date: 1/7/2019 3:07:00 PM Hi Carolyn. Congratulations on your win in the contest with this excellent write. It has happened, maybe still is. Some people just like to stir up the waters when all is calm. Excellent writer on the subject Carolyn. A fave. have a wonderful Monday. Hugs....Mike. XX Login to Reply

Cary Snowden Date: 1/6/2019 10:49:00 PM Nicely done and Congratulations on the win! -Cary Login to Reply

P.S. Awtry Date: 1/6/2019 5:27:00 PM Congratulations Carolyn on your well-deserved 1st place finish :) Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 1/6/2019 4:20:00 PM you did superbly, sweet Carolyn! Congrats! Login to Reply

Gary Smith Date: 1/6/2019 2:54:00 PM Excellent Carolyn, congrats. :) Login to Reply

Wren Rushing Date: 1/6/2019 8:35:00 AM Congratulations on your win! Well deserved! Login to Reply

John Gondolf Date: 1/6/2019 8:02:00 AM Well written, Carolyn, congrats on your win. John Login to Reply

Line Gauthier Date: 1/6/2019 7:26:00 AM Well penned, Carolyn. Congrats on your gold medal win. Login to Reply

Jan Allison Date: 1/6/2019 3:32:00 AM oh Gosh Carolyn I know this has occurred in the past when I first joined soup and is still happening now, I wish soup would banish these creeps to the bottom of the soup bowl:-( Many congrats on your top place!:-) hugs Jan xx Login to Reply

Gershon Wolf Date: 1/2/2019 8:10:00 PM I've just run into this (moron) predator, and he is clearly a coward, who will flee with any kind of bite-back. Nicely done. :) gw Login to Reply

Paul Callus Date: 1/1/2019 8:34:00 AM I don't know what brought this on, Carolyn, but you sure brought out into the open the havoc which some are tempted to sow; fortunately there is strength in numbers. Hugs // paul Login to Reply Carolyn Devonshire Date: 1/6/2019 2:22:00 PM It was for a contest, Paul, not based on anyone's personal experience.

Charles Messina Date: 12/31/2018 5:34:00 AM Wow Carolyn, this is great. I've been told that some have come and some have gone. But I love how you just put it out and on the line. Sorry I've been busy of late I hope you had a nice Christmas and wish for you to have a joyful and a very Happy New Year my dear friend. Sending love...Charlie Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 12/30/2018 3:14:00 PM oh I love this AND I can recall a time or two this actually happened here!!! Login to Reply

Janice Canerdy Date: 12/29/2018 8:24:00 PM Great take on the prompt-- very well-written, Carolyn! Janice Login to Reply

CayCay Jennings Date: 12/29/2018 3:01:00 PM So very well written and delivered, Carolyn! I simply cannot dwell on this shark's character for it is, above all else, sad to me and an ego problem. But I love the poem's style and rhymes that convey this shark's character with absolute clarity! Poetry hugs ... CayCay Login to Reply

Silent One Date: 12/29/2018 7:16:00 AM People like these need to no be in this soup, sadly there are a few... You expressed this very well, nice rhymes and flow... Should do well in the contest.. Login to Reply

Vijay Pandit Date: 12/29/2018 7:08:00 AM I am guessing this for the contest..a unique take you have on the theme, Carolyn. Like the line: peace in soupdom imperiled. Glad he fleed with jaws debased. Login to Reply

Arturo Michael Date: 12/29/2018 6:03:00 AM Wow Carolyn...Well done...you recognized the demon...now give him no more life... End of year coming...a big hug for you... Login to Reply

Tom Cunningham Date: 12/29/2018 2:30:00 AM Well written Carolyn, you find them in all walks of life, and you're right there is safety in numbers. We will mot let them win. Hope you had a nice Christmas. Tom. Login to Reply