Carolyn Devonshire Poet Rhyme

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Stirring the Soup

predator from the deep 
 destroyer of amity
  his fin glides toward you
    voracious enemy

peace in soupdom imperiled
 by beast with many names
  his temperament assails
   engaging in mind games

from friend to friend he turns
 spewing hateful lies
  his style so lackluster
   to divide and conquer, he tries

victims selected randomly
 he finds some won’t strike back
  but others band together
   planning a counter-attack

joining hands for defense
 souper strength shines strong
  he flees with jaws debased
   to rue his every wrong




*December 29, 2018.

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Lindsay Laurie January 10, 2019 at 5:15 PM Hello Carolyn … sharks on the soup. There has been an odd one or two. This is a very clever verse Carolyn - well done - Lindsay

Robert L. Hinshaw January 8, 2019 at 5:29 PM Congrats for your well-deserved First Place for this very creative and witty verse!. Thanks for your gracious comments re Granny's Tattoos. It is a "retool" of an old one I had on the site. There is another titled Tattoo From Kalamazoo you might find even sillier. Take good care - Bob

Vladislav Raven January 7, 2019 at 3:07 PM Hi Carolyn. Congratulations on your win in the contest with this excellent write. It has happened, maybe still is. Some people just like to stir up the waters when all is calm. Excellent writer on the subject Carolyn. A fave. have a wonderful Monday. Hugs....Mike. XX

Cary Snowden January 6, 2019 at 10:49 PM Nicely done and Congratulations on the win! -Cary

P.S. Awtry January 6, 2019 at 5:27 PM Congratulations Carolyn on your well-deserved 1st place finish :)

Andrea Dietrich January 6, 2019 at 4:20 PM you did superbly, sweet Carolyn! Congrats!

Gary Smith January 6, 2019 at 2:54 PM Excellent Carolyn, congrats. :)

Wren Rushing January 6, 2019 at 8:35 AM Congratulations on your win! Well deserved!

John Gondolf January 6, 2019 at 8:02 AM Well written, Carolyn, congrats on your win. John

Line Gauthier January 6, 2019 at 7:26 AM Well penned, Carolyn. Congrats on your gold medal win.

Jan Allison January 6, 2019 at 3:32 AM oh Gosh Carolyn I know this has occurred in the past when I first joined soup and is still happening now, I wish soup would banish these creeps to the bottom of the soup bowl:-( Many congrats on your top place!:-) hugs Jan xx

Gershon Wolf January 2, 2019 at 8:10 PM I've just run into this (moron) predator, and he is clearly a coward, who will flee with any kind of bite-back. Nicely done. :) gw

Paul Callus January 1, 2019 at 8:34 AM I don't know what brought this on, Carolyn, but you sure brought out into the open the havoc which some are tempted to sow; fortunately there is strength in numbers. Hugs // paul Carolyn Devonshire January 6, 2019 at 2:22 PM It was for a contest, Paul, not based on anyone's personal experience.

Charles Messina December 31, 2018 at 5:34 AM Wow Carolyn, this is great. I've been told that some have come and some have gone. But I love how you just put it out and on the line. Sorry I've been busy of late I hope you had a nice Christmas and wish for you to have a joyful and a very Happy New Year my dear friend. Sending love...Charlie

Andrea Dietrich December 30, 2018 at 3:14 PM oh I love this AND I can recall a time or two this actually happened here!!!

Janice Canerdy December 29, 2018 at 8:24 PM Great take on the prompt-- very well-written, Carolyn! Janice

CayCay Godwin December 29, 2018 at 3:01 PM So very well written and delivered, Carolyn! I simply cannot dwell on this shark's character for it is, above all else, sad to me and an ego problem. But I love the poem's style and rhymes that convey this shark's character with absolute clarity! Poetry hugs ... CayCay

Silent One December 29, 2018 at 7:16 AM People like these need to no be in this soup, sadly there are a few... You expressed this very well, nice rhymes and flow... Should do well in the contest..

Vijay Pandit December 29, 2018 at 7:08 AM I am guessing this for the contest..a unique take you have on the theme, Carolyn. Like the line: peace in soupdom imperiled. Glad he fleed with jaws debased.

Arturo Michael December 29, 2018 at 6:03 AM Wow Carolyn...Well done...you recognized the demon...now give him no more life... End of year coming...a big hug for you...

Tom Cunningham December 29, 2018 at 2:30 AM Well written Carolyn, you find them in all walks of life, and you're right there is safety in numbers. We will mot let them win. Hope you had a nice Christmas. Tom.