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For Robert James Liquori's Glenn Hughes poetry contest 

The poem is inpsired by the song - Still in love with you

 

In my diary of destinies, your song left a sweet scar. In the silent savagery of time, fate falters, floating like a feather, yet my soul still sings your name. In ivory and ebony hues of hollowness, you bring colours to my monochromatic existence. I find no wonderment in worthless words, losing patience with pondering in poetic passions. Intrinsic ink no longer flows in unwavering waves, yet my thoughts won't stop my heart from bleeding, seducing me to rewrite our tale in cranberry skies. We've been engraving metaphors into our souls, portraying purple star kissed tulips between our poems, blossoming bronze blushing gardenias in my love garden. When the last petal falls as prose like personification, I'll place you gently in between unread chapters, for you're the embodiment of my poetry of colours. I gaze beyond enchanting hills draped in green silk, wondering if love was a thorn less rose in an empty desert, would it perish like lonesome lips without your kiss? My muse is floating towards your majestic shores, but will I be cursed with a thousand springs without you? Distance can be cruel with melanin dreams and muted nights, serenading sweet symphonies and melancholic melodies. In my beloved's oasis, maybe jasmines have thistles too, like beautiful memories of a once majestic masterpiece. The horizons to your eyes can be violet, marigold or indigo, you could be a lily, lotus or an orchid in fluorescent orchards, just don't abandon me to bloom under midnight tones, as my forever ends with you under sapphire skies, as your eternal gardener radiating in saffron rosy rays.

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Date: 5/5/2024 12:40:00 PM
Silent One, you capture how a relationship changes us forever. I always hope relationships that end can end on a constructive note. Endings reveal a lot about another person.
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Date: 5/4/2024 6:50:00 AM
You always have a way of making love seem so comfortable. I could be persuaded to love with this. Such amazing imagery and metaphors. Beautiful personification along with all the beautiful colours and flowers. So deep, it cuts. Cheers Silent. Miss reading your works
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Date: 5/3/2024 10:24:00 AM
You captured the beauty and the pain that goes with this kind of love. Well written piece. love phyl
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Date: 5/3/2024 4:57:00 AM
Your words are full of deep emotions, though expressed in the contrast of ivory and ebony hues they create colour to monochromatic existence. I love the way your poetic thoughts flow, pondering in poetic passions. In spite of words sometimes seeming hollow and meaningless, I believe that the intrinsic ink that flows within you it is always there, waiting to be unleashed. Let the cranberry skies always inspire you. Brilliant as always and good luck in the contest...Hugs
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Date: 5/2/2024 11:24:00 PM
Beautiful and well deserved recognition for your expressions of longing and love, Kelli
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Date: 5/2/2024 6:36:00 AM
Dear Silent One, What a breathtaking journey through the depths of longing and love, filled with rich imagery and emotions. I just loved how you brought out the complexity of human connection, capturing the beauty and pain of intertwining destinies. What a testament to the power of poetry to express the ineffable and to touch the soul with its raw honesty. Wow, a wonderful, heartfelt reflection. - Blessings, Daniel
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Date: 5/2/2024 5:13:00 AM
Your ability to convey such deep emotion while also employing alliterative imagery is awe inspiring Silent One! Your talent runs just as deep, evident in all your work! I wish a Happy Thursday for you!!!
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Date: 5/2/2024 2:37:00 AM
You used all the necessary points to compose such a wonderful poem. The alliteration, the emotions, the imagery. A great passionate poem.
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Date: 5/2/2024 12:01:00 AM
Wonderful writing, as usual. I love this love story... hills draped in green silk... amazing writing. Love this. God bless you always, love, Gina
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Date: 5/1/2024 7:08:00 PM
Beautifully worded. Your use of metaphor and alliteration is spot on. The longing is palpable. Great write. Thanks for the visit to my page.
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Date: 5/1/2024 6:11:00 PM
You have a gift for eloquently describing love. Both the flow and the attitude are spot on. An emotional portrayal of love and heartbreak, as it echoes in recollections—As you say, you offer color to my colorless life in the hollowness of ivory and ebony. Words of yearning decorate your poetry with magnificent analogies and elaborate vocabulary, SO.
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Date: 5/1/2024 5:01:00 PM
Lovely metaphors and colorful descriptions in your poem. Your alliterations were outstanding and added to the fluidity of your words. Yours is a soulful read. I especially liked the last line (eternal gardener) Perfect...enjoy your evening, Sara
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Date: 5/1/2024 4:21:00 PM
Hello Silent One, I feel your pain of losing the love you lost. You need a hug. Hug from me my friend. I felt the sorrw in this poem. My frkiendf. enjoy your evening. Darlene/
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Date: 5/1/2024 4:10:00 PM
As a gardener you do have the touch S, I bet everything blooms beautifully in your soil, :)
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Date: 5/1/2024 4:03:00 PM
A heartfelt depiction of love and lost love--reverberating in memories--In ivory and ebony hues of hollowness, you bring colors to my monochromatic existence--as you say. Splendid metaphors and ornate diction adorn your poem in words of longing, SO.
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Date: 5/1/2024 3:16:00 PM
Silent, not here, but yes, i agree with the Emoress… breathtakingly & masterful. xox sally
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Date: 5/1/2024 2:54:00 PM
Reads like a good contender for the contest to me. Way to go. Filled with descriptive lines. Thanks for sharing your poem with us and for dropping by my page. Sara K
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Date: 5/1/2024 2:51:00 PM
Beautifully written with a smooth flow, my friend. Have a great day.
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Date: 5/1/2024 2:18:00 PM
Hi SO you write about love so beautifully. the flow is perfect and the mood sends shivers through me hugs Shadow
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Date: 5/1/2024 1:38:00 PM
Wow! This is just breathtaking! Your give love a whole new level of poetic definition! And I absolutely love the metaphors colors and flowers youv used throughout, depicting love longing and devotion amidst distance and so much more! How evocative and touching is this poem! So soulfully eloquent! I love many lines in this but the ending hits the strongest for me! Suits the song! this is impeccable!” you bring colours to my monochromatic existence. I find no wonderment in worthless word” your use of alliterations assonance imagery and so many more poetic techniques adds beauty and strength to what youv expressed and delivered here. Your poem goes so well with the song and is one of the best poems I’ve read in a while! A fave this is! Best wishes for the contest
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