Stifling

Respite From boiling sun Stealing my breath from me My heart pounds as the heat drains me Perspiration drips onto the hot ground I sit quiet and dream of a breeze Dark clouds gather above Perhaps by night Respite

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Robert Pettit

Date: 2/4/2012 3:59:00 PM

We are now in the middle of winter, and it is too cold outside to experience what you have described above. However, you have described it well with your wording. This is a good rictameter.

Nick Bagnall
Date: 2/4/2012 4:48:00 PM

Thanks for the comment, it's the middle of winter here as well. Just wanted something to warm me up.

Darryl Davis

Date: 1/30/2012 12:42:00 PM

I enjoyed reading this. Thanks for sharing :-)

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 1/27/2012 3:56:00 AM

Thank you Nick for let me reading yours poem today,good. - oxox love Anne-Lise