Richard Lamoureux Poet Lyric

Stepping Out of Time

Stepping out of time

I tried to make you jealous
As it slowly broke my heart
Every time the music played
it tore my soul apart

As I walked in the room
I put on my biggest smile
The love songs I wished were ours
played on the DJ,s dial

The music had a sultry beat
the night had a subtle glow
Strong hands held me oh so close
Yet it was you're love I wished to know

All the time I danced with him
You coulda tapped his shoulder
I tried so hard to make you jealous
in hopes it would make you bolder

But step by step you walked away
with each step it broke my heart
every beat that the music played
slowly ripped my soul apart

He expressed words I wished were yours
beautiful words whispered in my ear
Yet as we circled round the room
it was only you I wanted near

My thoughts of you they lingered
with each song I slowly died
I longed for your familiar hands
if only you had tried

I wanted to make you jealous
Step by step you walked away
my strategy it backfired
I wish I could reclaim yesterday!


Chuck Melugin wrote a piece titled "One Song at a Time" that I quite enjoyed. I thought what if like most men we don't have a clue what is going through a woman's mind. So I wrote this piece from the woman's perspective. Ladies, I hope I have done okay here. Chuck I hope I have not been to bold by expanding on your amazing write.

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Vegter Papyrus October 22, 2018 at 3:30 PM That's what keeps us around...trying to figure them out. Listening and observation has been the best teachers for me. I like! Richard Lamoureux October 22, 2018 at 4:12 PM Thanks again Keith.

Edward Mccall July 4, 2017 at 10:28 AM this is such a wonderfully written piece.it's never easy to write from the perspective of someone else. But you've done a great job here.

Debbie Duncan May 1, 2017 at 1:10 AM Nicely written. thank you as always for reading my Like An Angel :) Richard Lamoureux May 1, 2017 at 7:29 AM Thanks Debbie, it was my pleasure.

Maurice Yvonne April 29, 2017 at 6:48 AM This is very well written Richard. The perspective interesting, bold and challenging. A Great read! Richard Lamoureux April 29, 2017 at 7:46 AM Thanks Maurice.

Carole Duet April 25, 2017 at 4:20 PM P.S. I meant to tell you this poem reminds me a lot of my poem, "He Touched Me", if you would like to take a look.

Carole Duet April 22, 2017 at 11:24 PM Hi Richard. I really like this poem. It really is a lot like what a woman would be thinking...at least I would. Nice poem! Richard Lamoureux April 23, 2017 at 8:10 AM Thanks Carol.;0)

Keith O.J. Hunt April 19, 2017 at 2:57 PM You have such great ideas for writes Richard, and your wording and your story-telling ability always keep the reader til the end; my girlfriend has so many female friends trying to just find a 'good guy' its mind boggling; and they are nice girls --- what's wrong with 'men' these days? Richard Lamoureux April 20, 2017 at 7:51 AM Good question Keith. I think there are a lot of nice guys and girls, they just can't seem to get together.

Paul Callus April 18, 2017 at 2:24 PM Many women know that a relationship is not working, and yet they persist on breathing life into it. Using jealousy as a weapon only serves to make things worse! Very well tackled subject, Richard. ~ Regards // paul Richard Lamoureux April 20, 2017 at 7:52 AM I agree Paul, thanks for the visit.

Charmaine Chircop April 17, 2017 at 1:35 PM You know a woman's mind and heart so well so it seems..Sometimes life is like that indeed..those We hardly try to impress will never notice...and those who do their best to get our attention remain unnoticed...C'est la vie.... Really enjoyed this Rick.Nice to see you writing..Hope you 've had a wonderful Easter. :) Richard Lamoureux April 18, 2017 at 8:09 AM Yes, a wonderful Easter but I have so much going on that I haven't had much time for writing or visiting as much as I would like. I do appreciate your visit and thoughtful comment. Hugs Rick.

Casarah Nance April 17, 2017 at 11:35 AM You are such a great storyteller through your writes, such great reads. hugs Richard Lamoureux April 18, 2017 at 8:09 AM Thanks Casarah and a big hug back to you.

Eileen Manassian April 17, 2017 at 1:24 AM You've done well, Richard. Trying to get someone jealous could backfire...Why is it that those who love...are ignored and those who don't...are desired. It's a mystery and always will be. Great write Richard Lamoureux April 17, 2017 at 7:16 AM I'm amazed at how many women are attracted to men that treat them poorly. It's almost like being addicted to a drug.

Darren White April 17, 2017 at 1:15 AM This is a clever and quite endearing poem. It's not how I felt during my teen years, but it most certainly is how I can feel sometimes now... It makes me wonder though. Don't straight men ever feel that way? Richard Lamoureux April 17, 2017 at 7:18 AM The answer is yes. I guess it all part of the jumble and gambit of human emotions.

Carl Fraser April 16, 2017 at 8:10 PM A great and interesting twist on how a woman feels as told by a man in her shoes. You have captuered the essence quite well Richard. A awesome write. Blessings Carl Richard Lamoureux April 17, 2017 at 7:18 AM Thanks Carl. Blessings to you as well

James Marshall Goff April 16, 2017 at 7:48 PM Heart wrenching lines, Richard...nicely done! and Happy Easter to you also, my friend! Richard Lamoureux April 17, 2017 at 7:19 AM Thanks James.

Lynn Marie April 16, 2017 at 2:28 PM A most creative realistic piece Richard:) You brought us back to the 'teen years' where the music that played during that fateful 'dance' stays with one for life and hearing the first note, floods one with memories. Great perspective, fantastic writing. blessings xxx Richard Lamoureux April 16, 2017 at 4:04 PM Thanks Lynn Marie! Richard Lamoureux April 16, 2017 at 4:02 PM Thanks Lynn Marie!

Alexis Y. April 16, 2017 at 2:20 PM WoW! Richard, You did an excellent job writing from a woman's perspective. I agree with Andrea you were very convincing. Everyone can't do this and you did it well. I tend to write from a man's perspective alot. When you have a chance read my poem " Redemption ". A without a doubt seven and a fav:-) Alexis Richard Lamoureux April 16, 2017 at 4:01 PM Thanks Alexis, I will look it up

Chuck Melugin April 16, 2017 at 12:15 PM Richard, this is a great poetic gem.I love everything about it, from the title and taking it from a woman's perspective, to the stellar last line. I'm glad I had a small part in it's creation. My best to you, chuck Richard Lamoureux April 16, 2017 at 4:00 PM I'm glad you enjoyed it Chuck.;0)

Andrea Dietrich April 16, 2017 at 10:25 AM Richard, I was thinking,"why is he writing like a girl?" and then I thought,"is he writing like a gay?" So yes, my friend, you were VERY convincing!!! I have had this kind of thing happen to me. It's really heart breaking to be a teenage girl and the guy you are crushing on won't give you the time of day! So I really related to this one. That dang Chris Frogley. he was MY crush from this poem. soupmail Darren White April 17, 2017 at 1:12 AM Hahaha, writing like a gay :) There is some truth in that! Richard Lamoureux April 16, 2017 at 10:40 AM Thanks for the soup mail Andrea.