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Staying Alive Ii - the Wheel

STAYING ALIVE II – The Wheel

combatant with life
pure essence of blood and bone
in endless orbit
the flow through many houses
many loves    hates    many deaths

lifetanka

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Joe Maverick

Date: 9/16/2013 2:53:00 PM

Interesting visuals described sharply Daver take care Joe..)

Gwendolen Song

Date: 1/31/2012 5:35:00 AM

talk about reflection...wow, Daver, this is it! ....off to the next part....

Lucinda Cayton

Date: 1/30/2012 9:02:00 AM

life and death. You still have breath, be blessed. sad, but I cannot seem to cry at death, I cry when I miss people, but I've never seen it either. Different kind of writing of its own, Thank you for sharing, I am sure the time will come for all to experience death, hopefully our journeys fullfillment to serve Our God is complete, I think thats the worst sin, is being called, and know what your purpose is: and not complete it before death come shuddering.... God bless, Cindy

Elizabeth Wesley

Date: 1/25/2012 7:50:00 PM

So glad I found part 2; so sad we have to combat life. Some angles are worse than others but I'm glad for the in between parts; they make it all worthwhile. Great poem Daver, covers a lot of territory. Luv, Lizzie

Robert A. Dufresne

Date: 1/22/2012 7:02:00 AM

You've caused that wheel to slow down a bit for me as I read and reread your poem Daver. A very interesting way to personify it as it goes round and round. Ya got me musin' again . have a great one. Daver. I'll be doing the same and just a hangin on to one of the spokes . God bless

Brenda Victoria Northeast

Date: 1/20/2012 5:04:00 PM

I do need to study to understand the different forms- to appreciate more- I truly enjoyed reading your work, blessings, Brenda : )

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 1/19/2012 10:51:00 PM

life is an every day fight for some... Daver, love the depth in your poem,..p.d.

James Peranteau

Date: 1/19/2012 3:02:00 PM

I love Tanka's Dave, I had a great time reading your poetry today..thanx dear poet ! Have a wonderful week my friend....much love, james

Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/19/2012 1:46:00 PM

Interesting work..Not sure of the interpertation that you would have the reader to obtain from it though...Enjoyed reading your work..Sara

Daver Austin
Date: 1/30/2012 3:29:00 PM

Zeek'l saw the wheel - way up in the middle of the air. Love, daver

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 1/19/2012 12:47:00 PM

Thank you for sharing your love of poetry with us here at PoetrySoup . I enjoyed reading your amazing writing today. Love, Carol

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/18/2012 5:50:00 PM

I really like this one. Just love this form, tanka. GREAT last line, daver.

Russell Sivey

Date: 1/18/2012 3:14:00 PM

Wow Daver, this is a great Tanka! I absolutely love Tankas and you have written a fantastic one! Keep on writing them, they get easier with time! Awesome Work!!

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