Carolyn Devonshire Poet Than-Bauk

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State

of

the

Nation

 

State of the Nation Tb

State of the Nation


Nature unchaste,
river waste drifts;
distasteful scene. 

Shorebirds in flight,
gray and white gulls;
despite foul winds.

Mercury fear;
poison-smeared fish
make dreary food.




*January 29, 2019
For Charles Messina’s Than-Bauk Contest

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Ann Gilmour February 14, 2019 at 12:25 AM Many congrats Carolyn, such an important message conveyed so well within your poem - so sad but true. Kindest thoughts Ann xx

Jan Allison February 13, 2019 at 3:12 PM very vivid imagery, such a sad state of affairs Carolyn:-( many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx

Michelle Faulkner February 11, 2019 at 10:51 PM Congratulations on your win, well-versed warning!

Alexis Y. February 11, 2019 at 11:40 AM Hi Carolyn, All three of your poems well written and true. Congratulations on a well deserved win:-) Alexis

Joseph May February 11, 2019 at 7:28 AM So sad that so many rivers are polluted.. Congrats on your win..

Charles Messina February 10, 2019 at 9:50 PM This was a great write Carolyn. So much truth and sadness told here. It such a pity what's happened and is still happening. Well done as usual, Congratulations on your 1st place win.. love & hugs...Charlie Carolyn Devonshire February 11, 2019 at 5:48 AM I enjoyed this form, Charles. Thank you for choosing Than Bauk and giving us this challenge, my friend!

Gershon Wolf January 30, 2019 at 4:34 PM Crucial message wrapped in clever Than Bauk rhyme. Nicely done, Carolyn and G.L. in the contest. Best wishes, Gershon

Tom Cunningham January 30, 2019 at 2:52 AM I remember as a child going to the shop to pick up groceries and everything was fresh and sold loosely now the food we have is full of chemicals wrapped in plastic that finds it's way to our oceans and on land. The world is becoming one big dustbin. Good luck. Tom Carolyn Devonshire January 30, 2019 at 1:30 PM So many of our favorite places have changed, Tom. The plastic refuse is choking fish and wildlife. Thanks for sharing

Arthur Vaso January 29, 2019 at 9:49 PM Very well said, a state all of us from all over the world should take care off and care more about!!

Eve Roper January 29, 2019 at 9:23 PM Brilliant, Caroly, a perfect verse for the contest.

Rico Leffanta January 29, 2019 at 4:17 PM Too true; people today really do not care what their grandchildren will need to eat. Good luck! Aloha! Rico Carolyn Devonshire January 29, 2019 at 4:29 PM I worry there'll be nothing safe left to eat, Rico. Thanks for reading, my friend.