Stars Never Knew the Breadth of My Heartache

I was drawn to her in temporal depth of night,
glancing her way in beams of harvested light
But in mourning her, I wept behind shrouds,
concealed by a hovering bank of sullen clouds

She'd danced for me in a green ruffled gown
Her supple skin changed to russet then brown
How she teased me from the height of her haven
So fetching, she'd aroused the caw of a raven.

Though love was too brief, merely one season,
my ageless vision had been ripened by reason
I watched as she fell prey to a merciless wind
and cursed it in anger as though it had sinned

I'd flail the slayer of my adored one's demise
but I can't bridle the wind, racing through skies
She was stolen from me by another's touch
Stripped from limb and held captive in his clutch

I cried softly when night finally faded away,
forfeited my will and the power to hold sway
My tears mingled with each crystalline snowflake
Stars never knew the breadth of my heartache

A fleecy white blanket has mantled her tree
I'll imagine she's there sleeping, thinking of me
And when in Spring she awakens once more,
from aloft I'll beam at her, rekindling our rapport

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018



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Date: 9/5/2020 9:12:00 PM
"I watched as she fell prey to a merciless wind and cursed it in anger as though it had sinned" ... nice. I am glad you have kept your poems up.
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Lin Lane
Date: 9/6/2020 6:07:00 AM
Hi Rob. I thought by now I would've been forgotten, but thank you for reading this one. It was one of my favorites that didn't get much attention, but I'm glad you like it. Soup mail for you.
Date: 7/6/2018 12:26:00 AM
Hi there Lin.. I thoroughly enjoyed reading your well crafted write this evening. I always appreciate the giftings of a pen in the hand of a poet! I also enjoyed the way you weaved a perfect metaphor into your piece!
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Lin Lane
Date: 7/6/2018 2:41:00 PM
Thank you for such kind compliments, LM.
Date: 7/5/2018 1:55:00 PM
Oh wow Lin...a wonderful metaphor
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Lin Lane
Date: 7/6/2018 2:41:00 PM
Oh that's quite alright, Time. ;-)
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Tim Smith
Date: 7/5/2018 6:26:00 PM
Dang auto correct...sorry Lin it changed your name to line
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Lin Lane
Date: 7/5/2018 5:21:00 PM
Thank you very much, Tim.
Date: 7/5/2018 8:19:00 AM
beautiful beautiful beautiful imagery Lin, i got a chill down my spine reading this one, adding this gem to my faves:-) - really loved these lines "My tears mingled with each crystaline snowflake Stars never knew the breadth of my heartache" hugs jan xx
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Lin Lane
Date: 7/5/2018 8:47:00 AM
Thanks ever so much for your kind remarks, Jan, and for pointing out the lines you preferred. ;-)
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