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When she smiled at him ---- the world could wait, with its myriad of contradictions and infinite postures to feigned joy; there could be no deceit in her light.... That gorgeous assurance that he was as alive as the vast heartbeat of the cosmos; what a whetted pulse to quicken and burst upon the shoulders of stars, and saddle comets to flame.... ride the rays of the sun.... As a child again under the spell of ice cream, shiny-toy and heroic dream; the world could wait, (when she smiled at him)

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Date: 2/11/2018 8:55:00 PM
Keith, your imagery used to describe his emotions is truly breathtaking and captivating. So beautiful! Warmest wishes. ~Susan
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Keith O.J. Hunt
Date: 2/11/2018 10:26:00 PM
Thanks Susan, I love the simplicity of this piece; how a smile from a woman exceeds many other joys in life:-)
Date: 12/18/2014 4:37:00 PM
Beautifully penned.
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Date: 12/13/2014 3:36:00 PM
Keith, it's been too long since I've read one of your beautiful works.. Like fine wine you only grow better with time!
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Date: 12/11/2014 2:50:00 AM
Great imagery - though I think you may have meant whetted pulse, as in sharpened.
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Keith O.J. Hunt
Date: 12/11/2014 4:00:00 PM
Good catch Perry, I will edit... Thanks for the visit! Keith :-)
Date: 12/10/2014 10:09:00 PM
You have worked your magic again Keith, great poem!
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Keith O.J. Hunt
Date: 12/11/2014 4:09:00 PM
Great for your visit arthur, always an honor! Keith:-)
Date: 12/10/2014 12:58:00 PM
A smile can work wonders...that's what I always say...and you prove this by what you write in this lovely poem. You are captivated by it, and the results show! #7 // paul
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Date: 12/9/2014 5:01:00 AM
- A beautiful poem, Keith ! - a smile can make the world beautiful :) - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Keith O.J. Hunt
Date: 12/11/2014 4:10:00 PM
....indeed :-)!
Date: 12/8/2014 5:36:00 PM
Some very good metaphoric language used in this one..I enjoyed reading this one today..Thanks for the visit to my page..I appreciate the time spent there..Sara
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Date: 12/8/2014 5:35:00 PM
I really love the way you described the feeling her smile gave to him..Like a child having that delicious ice-cream.Just lovely,Hope to read more new poens from you soon.I like them !: )
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Date: 12/8/2014 5:12:00 PM
truly excellent piece of writing keith beautifully penned
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Date: 12/8/2014 4:58:00 PM
I am back to add to my fav list... Thanks much..
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Date: 12/8/2014 4:57:00 PM
Love this write and can see a part two coming (if you so choose). The image and the message merge beautifully with concept of the promise within that smile! Bravo, Super 7 my friend. Your writes have very high quality coupled with that fantastic, unique flair!
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