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Stagnant Pollution

Shards of listening sunflowers, she's trapped in the gardens reflection, contaminated shattered seedlings was not the topiary's intention, inside the stamen, her severed particles, causing an afflicted defection, scraps of glass and plastic lies beneath the roots, depleting the petals complexion, the world divides into pieces from this stagnant pollution infection. Date Written: February 23, 2016 For The Contest, Fragment of Life, Sponsor, Broken Wings

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Sarita Milliner

Date: 3/12/2016 10:17:00 AM

Congrats on you win, Laura!

Lu Loo
Date: 3/12/2016 11:46:00 AM

Thank you Sarita :)-luloo *smiles*

Charlie Smith

Date: 3/9/2016 8:30:00 AM

Captured the theme. Great work and congratulations

Lu Loo
Date: 3/9/2016 8:52:00 AM

Thank you Charlie :)-luloo *Smiles*

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 3/8/2016 10:09:00 PM

Wonderful poetry Laura.. congrats on big win.

Lu Loo
Date: 3/9/2016 8:51:00 AM

Thank you Dr. Upma :)-luloo *smiles*

Sam Jameson

Date: 3/8/2016 1:44:00 PM

Nicely done-- captured the cause and effect aspects very well. Very descriptive words with flow, and able to visualize the beauty and the destruction...a job well done luloo! Congrats on your placement.

Lu Loo
Date: 3/9/2016 8:50:00 AM

Thank you Sam :)-luloo *Smiles*

Probir Gupta

Date: 3/8/2016 8:04:00 AM

A realist poem. Congrats for the win...

Lu Loo
Date: 3/9/2016 8:50:00 AM

Thank you Probir:)-luloo *smiles*

Susan Gentry

Date: 3/7/2016 11:25:00 PM

Congratulations on your win! A 7... Excellent take on the theme, well written.

Lu Loo
Date: 3/9/2016 8:49:00 AM

Thank you Susan :)-luloo *smiles*

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/7/2016 3:28:00 PM

The effects of pollution on this poor plant was shown very descriptively. Big congrats on your win, Laura.

Lu Loo
Date: 3/7/2016 3:57:00 PM

Thank you Andrea :)- luloo *smiles*

Eve Roper

Date: 3/7/2016 12:43:00 PM

Laura, absolutely beautiful congratulations on the “Fragment Of Life” contest a 7: ) Hugs Eve

Lu Loo
Date: 3/7/2016 2:13:00 PM

Thank you for all your kind feedback Eve :)-luloo *smiles*

Jan Allison

Date: 3/7/2016 12:29:00 PM

five fabulous lines LuLoo many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx

Lu Loo
Date: 3/7/2016 1:31:00 PM

Thank you lovely lady :)-luloo *smiles*

Paul Callus

Date: 3/7/2016 11:10:00 AM

Very beautifully expressed, Laura! An excellent take on this proposed theme...and I like your rhyme. ~ Congratulations on this high flying win:) ~ Regards // paul

Lu Loo
Date: 3/7/2016 1:31:00 PM

Thank you Paul very much for all your kind feedback :)-luloo *Smiles*

Sandra Haight

Date: 3/7/2016 10:27:00 AM

Great theme for 'fragment of life', Laura. Love your message and how well you did with difficult monorhyme you used. Congratulations on your fine win. Hugs, Sandra

Lu Loo
Date: 3/7/2016 10:52:00 AM

Thank you Sweet Sandra :)-luloo *Smiles*

Daniel Turner

Date: 2/24/2016 8:11:00 AM

I'm with you here, Laura. I've seen so much pollution in my life. I have seen the destruction it can and is doing already, in my lifetime. Excellent poem from an excellent poet. A7

Lu Loo
Date: 2/24/2016 10:10:00 AM

Thank you very much! Thank you for popping in and leaving lovely positive feedback. I always appreciate that :)-luloo

Janice Canerdy

Date: 2/23/2016 4:34:00 PM

So true--life can become "contaminated" with stagnation! Good poem. Janice

Lu Loo
Date: 2/23/2016 5:41:00 PM

Thank you Janice:)-luloo