Springku

The sloshing darkness Amidst my room of warm light Bring now your spring bird!

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/22/2010 7:38:00 PM

very interesting title and poem!! Reminded me of a water bed, the way mine always sloshed!! Luv,Andrea

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 1/31/2010 11:09:00 AM

Matt, first I must say that I absolutely love the name. And the birds will be coming, soon. Keep your poetry flowing. Smiles... Dane Ann

Date: 1/27/2010 1:08:00 PM

Interesting take on the contest. Can't wait for spring with below zero temps here in North Dakota. Best wishes with this poem. Keep on writing!! Karen

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 1/27/2010 6:38:00 AM

Thank you for entering my contest Matt. Love, Carol

Lena Townsend

Date: 1/27/2010 6:15:00 AM

Interesting Haiku. I like the idea of "sloshing darkness" it brings movement to something that normally seems still and lifeless. This piece is thought provoking and different from the "norm." I like it. Thanks for sharing. Smiles from Lolita