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Spring Into Haiku

mountain field aglow palettes strewn as spring desires- random perfection "Spring into Haiku" Contest -30 Apr 2014-

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Dr.Ram Mehta
Date: 5/16/2014 9:13:00 PM
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Great haiku. Congratulations on the win, david
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 5/16/2014 8:28:00 PM
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Your lines 1 & 2 don't connect grammatically so you have 3 parts you needed 2 ;) ex: [the mountain field's/aglow with wildflowers-] random perfection is a mental construct you need something concrete sensory; you will get it I'm sure!! Congrad's on your win. Light & Love
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David Mohn
Date: 5/16/2014 8:49:00 PM
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Thanks for the input Debbie. I did see the lack of "objectivity" in the 3rd line but missed the disconnect with the first 2...appreciate the comments
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Roy Jerden
Date: 5/16/2014 7:12:00 PM
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Nice one. Making the haiku cut with Deb is tough. Congratulations!
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Linda Jackson
Date: 5/16/2014 7:58:00 AM
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Perfectly captured - images brilliant. Congrats Linda x
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Lori Lucas Mcclure
Date: 5/16/2014 7:51:00 AM
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Congratulations on your win! Lori
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 5/15/2014 9:24:00 PM
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wow, this is awesome. REally a clever one. Congrats on your win.
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David Mohn
Date: 5/16/2014 9:57:00 AM
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Thanks Andrea...I knew it wasn't truly "objective" in the classic Haiku sense but I liked the way it felt
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Dr.Ram Mehta
Date: 5/1/2014 1:35:00 AM
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Lovely picture created by lovely images, david
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David Mohn
Date: 5/1/2014 10:55:00 AM
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Thanks Dr. Ram...I appreciate the kind words

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