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Spontaneity

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Written: February 23, 2024 Rumi Quote: “There is a voice that doesn't use words. Listen.”-
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Line of inquiry: "discarding narrow thought flow crutch we learn directly by soft touch and what we garner we relay to the vast void in childlike play entwined thus with the universe we dance without need to rehearse" _______________________
Vivid sense surges with staggering splendor, A fluid-fetching flow fancies to surrender. Enabling your soul to uphold the trend, And as it stirs, so delightfully, transcend. No diction is required whilst we convey love, Randomized retorts reveal our reason above. We perceive touch as a subtle twirling skill, The cosmos doesn't require any prep drills. We converge as we engage in teenage play, Our minds are unrestricted to roam or sway. Vatic validation verifies a vague version of life, As one, we grow in harmony, bereft of strife. Life was hardly fun or pure when I was awake, Spontaneous, affectionate, and ecstatic break. A future or past view is at odds with the present. Risen to reality after years of ruse, apparent. Cautious ego, everlasting treading lightly, Surprise is quelled by touch trends tightly. With a hunched posture, seemingly oblivious, Bonding sorrow with each breath is insidious. Heart and head are at odds, never in harmony, In shadows dwell love and light doth scurvily. Enticing mind and soul together to compile, Embracing raw beginnings as our self-guile. Unpredictability is the hallmark of spontaneity, Allowing and lively, it exuded awe and acuity. Alive in hollowness, connected with the divine. Freely finding fulfillment fiber forward shine. We have a simmering yearning in our air, Everlasting flames that are growing bare. Withies, willow whirling with weedy woe, Genial greens growing a gulp group glow.

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Date: 2/24/2024 10:59:00 AM
This is deep exploration of the contest theme, my friend. Your message resonates in this poem. An awesome Rumi quote you chose to enhance your theme, Lasaad.
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Date: 2/24/2024 5:24:00 AM
SP, I think you have touched on and explored the fact that our brain/heart combination has a lot of feedback to offer us if we give ourselves the freedom and time to listen. Hopefully, we can spend the time we need in an environment that does not restrict our creativity and spontaneity.
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Date: 2/23/2024 10:12:00 PM
I like the RUMI quote at the beginning, Sotto Poet. Awesome alliteration uses throughout the poem. An enjoyable read. Write On, my friend! Bill
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Date: 2/23/2024 5:05:00 PM
This is a nicely penned poem. A lot of effort went into this and it actually has a rhyme scheme which I appreciate. Thanks.
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Date: 2/23/2024 4:57:00 PM
your poem was brilliantly crafted with a flow of alliteration and imagery that captured my heart. You artistically crafted an outstanding poem using your masterful vocabulary as well as your introspection and wisdom. I especially liked this line: 'Unpredictability is the hallmark of spontaneity.' True words. I have endless accolades for both this poem and your creative genius. your poetess friend in Texas, Sara
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Date: 2/23/2024 3:45:00 PM
Dear Sotto, Your consummate command of the English language and its rich literary potential are to the fore in this work. You have forged a deep alliance between vocabulary and spontaneity giving full rein to colour, clarity and imagination. I was touched by your generous insights on Upbeat Day Ahead. Howard
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Date: 2/23/2024 1:18:00 PM
Sotto, beautifully penned for the contest, you grasped the theme and wrote a splendid poem, well done, blessings, Constance
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Date: 2/23/2024 11:58:00 AM
Enjoyed listening to your beautiful, soft poetry on spontaneity. Thank you for sharing it. It reminded me of a children's book, "If You Listen", written by Charlotte Zolotow. -Smita
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Date: 2/23/2024 10:56:00 AM
Dear Sotto, Your poem is exquisite and uses wonderful emotive language, piecing together the essence of life's experiences with poetic finesse. Each stanza dances with its own rhythm, inviting me, the reader, to embark on a journey of introspection and reflection. The way you explore themes of love, spontaneity, and the complexities of human emotions is both profound and captivating. Your words are where the mundane and the extraordinary coexist, joy and sorrow intertwine, and every moment is infused with meaning. Your poem touches upon the universal truths of the human experience. Thank you for sharing your artistry and insight through this beautiful piece. - Blessings, Daniel
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