Spoiled

Though her flesh was soft as moonlight,
He found her soul a bleak midnight.

Her sapphire eyes, banana sky,
But she spoiled things like a fruit fly.

He’s out of time, needs a bypass -
Her body, shaped like an hourglass.

6/16/2023
Copyright © | Year Posted 2023

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Loving Iii Avatar
June 16, 2023 at 4:08 PM
I'm still wondering. Short but a story still. And what kind of piece is it? couldnt understand.
Rodrigues Avatar
June 16, 2023 at 6:50 PM
I have no idea if I did this form justice. I went along with the part where there is a displeasure of his lover. Thanks for reading, John!
Kendrick Avatar
June 16, 2023 at 11:35 AM
Good one. Each one with a contrast and not adding up so good for a great relationship. LOL..Thanks for sharing and for your visits. Sara
Rodrigues Avatar
June 16, 2023 at 1:25 PM
Thank you! Thought I would try this form :)
Goldsmith Avatar
June 16, 2023 at 11:31 AM
Your "SPOILED" is a creative write. I enjoyed it. Have a fun/blessed ~~ day/weekend..............
Rodrigues Avatar
June 16, 2023 at 1:25 PM
Thank you, Paula! Have a wonderful weekend!
Buhagiar Avatar
June 16, 2023 at 10:52 AM
Looks are not all. It is the heart that counts. Hugs.
Rodrigues Avatar
June 16, 2023 at 1:25 PM
Yes! So true!
Lane Avatar
June 16, 2023 at 10:09 AM
Kim, I'm completely ignorant about this form and I'm not sure if I'm reading your intent correctly, but I suppose every reader can give their own perception. Time is hardly ever in our favor.
Lane Avatar
June 16, 2023 at 2:13 PM
With your keen poetic sense, Kim, I’m sure you have. ;-)
Rodrigues Avatar
June 16, 2023 at 1:26 PM
First time trying this form! Hopefully I’ve done it justice, Lin.
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