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Splitting Heart Ache

visions of you
romantic visions of just us two
can these visions be possibly true

dreams of you
wonderful dreams of just us two
are these dreams really really true

my heart is now black and blue
my heart was once for you
my heart is now broken

in two

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Casarah Nance

Date: 10/28/2014 7:34:00 AM

Oh poor baby, black and blue heart, lets' make it red again.

Sebastian Aaron Baez
Date: 10/28/2014 9:34:00 AM

I can think of something that can get it throbbing red again! :)

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 10/26/2014 4:58:00 PM

ok I'm a fan really liking all your writes.

Sebastian Aaron Baez
Date: 10/26/2014 5:14:00 PM

Thanks. I wish I could read more of everyone's poetry, but I'm always so busy writing my own. Sorry I haven't stopped by to comment on yours.

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 10/26/2014 6:21:00 AM

the title caught me.. "splitting heartache is somewhat so intense........" I like the soft way you first two stanzas.. like was establishing how it could have happen.. the third paragraph with your first line and the others is ok.. sad and tragic...but i want to read more of how that splitting is.. :) specifics..

Sebastian Aaron Baez
Date: 10/26/2014 6:48:00 AM

I would like to share the specifics but this is a fictional write. I'm glade you found it intriguing. I was just feeling a bit sad when writing this.

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 10/25/2014 2:57:00 PM

This is so beautiful Seb..But the ending is so heartwrenchingly sad...Hope its fiction.My heart is now black and blue ..Almost like a cloaked universe waiting for a star.A favourite

Sebastian Aaron Baez
Date: 10/26/2014 3:47:00 AM

I hope it wasn't my doing that you changed your pic AGAIN! :) Thank you for your heart warming reply. I am still surprised that you even remember me.

Charmaine Chircop
Date: 10/25/2014 6:14:00 PM

I consider all my friends special and you are one of my friends Seb.. You are surrounded by good friends here.You are not alone

Sebastian Aaron Baez
Date: 10/25/2014 3:24:00 PM

It's nice to see your beautiful painting, I mean avatar. :) I apologize for turning your heart black and blue, that was not my intention. Don't worry about me, I just a little down and it is a fictional write. You sure know how to make a person feel special.