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splitting heart ache

visions of you romantic visions of just us two can these visions be possibly true dreams of you wonderful dreams of just us two are these dreams really really true my heart is now black and blue my heart was once for you my heart is now broken in two

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Date: 10/28/2014 7:34:00 AM
Oh poor baby, black and blue heart, lets' make it red again.
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Sebastian Aaron Baez
Date: 10/28/2014 9:34:00 AM
I can think of something that can get it throbbing red again! :)
Date: 10/26/2014 4:58:00 PM
ok I'm a fan really liking all your writes.
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Sebastian Aaron Baez
Date: 10/26/2014 5:14:00 PM
Thanks. I wish I could read more of everyone's poetry, but I'm always so busy writing my own. Sorry I haven't stopped by to comment on yours.
Date: 10/26/2014 6:21:00 AM
the title caught me.. "splitting heartache is somewhat so intense........" I like the soft way you first two stanzas.. like was establishing how it could have happen.. the third paragraph with your first line and the others is ok.. sad and tragic...but i want to read more of how that splitting is.. :) specifics..
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Sebastian Aaron Baez
Date: 10/26/2014 6:48:00 AM
I would like to share the specifics but this is a fictional write. I'm glade you found it intriguing. I was just feeling a bit sad when writing this.
Date: 10/25/2014 2:57:00 PM
This is so beautiful Seb..But the ending is so heartwrenchingly sad...Hope its fiction.My heart is now black and blue ..Almost like a cloaked universe waiting for a star.A favourite
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Sebastian Aaron Baez
Date: 10/26/2014 3:47:00 AM
I hope it wasn't my doing that you changed your pic AGAIN! :) Thank you for your heart warming reply. I am still surprised that you even remember me.
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Charmaine Chircop
Date: 10/25/2014 6:14:00 PM
I consider all my friends special and you are one of my friends Seb.. You are surrounded by good friends here.You are not alone
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Sebastian Aaron Baez
Date: 10/25/2014 3:24:00 PM
It's nice to see your beautiful painting, I mean avatar. :) I apologize for turning your heart black and blue, that was not my intention. Don't worry about me, I just a little down and it is a fictional write. You sure know how to make a person feel special.
Date: 10/25/2014 3:35:00 AM
It happens to most of ...you need to get back on that horse and ride again
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Sebastian Aaron Baez
Date: 10/25/2014 6:48:00 AM
Thanks Tim and thanks for your concern, but this one is a fictional write. Perhaps my loneliness got the better of me.