Splat

For the soul is stripped,
The heart just stops,
The gloom of the day,
Enchanted without worry,
For it is gone,
All the feelings produced,
Numb as we sit,
We are yet at work,
But the motivations are just that,
No motivation,
No sense of will,
Cascading downwards,
For what went wrong?
How did this overwhelming feeling erupt,
Where do we fit?
Where will we land?
Tumbling,
Falling,
Stumbling,
With no hope in sight,
But the breaking of the ground,
Leave, let me tumble,
To much wasted time,
SPLAT!

09/07

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 6/21/2010 9:14:00 AM
thank you Joseph
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Date: 6/21/2010 8:42:00 AM
I like the sequencing of this poem. The progression of the storyline is right on point. The ending is very amusing. Great job! Joseph
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Date: 6/21/2010 6:47:00 AM
Thank you Carol
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Date: 6/21/2010 5:22:00 AM
I would like to welcome you to PoetrySoup Scott. Wishing you the best in your writing endeavors. If you have questions please feel free to ask anyone here. We are all willing to help and if we don't know the answer we will find someone who does. Love, Carol
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Date: 6/19/2010 11:28:00 AM
interesting write, you just wanted to let your self fall, at times we all do, enjoyed your write..P.D.
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Date: 6/18/2010 6:03:00 PM
Intriguing and imaginative write. Nice read.
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Date: 6/18/2010 5:22:00 PM
funny...yet not, so true
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