Spiritually Ill

Long was my time of proudly witnessing 
her endless charms ability to seed smiles and 
respect with Southern wiles aplenty.

Then, intrusion of quick insist, in shadowed shift, 
gave glimpse of her facial expression failing her 
known impression and lilt.

Flash lit sad scripts and ego drips, pained my 
daughter pity adrift.   Each year since, our 
shared authentic love became more ripped as 
she brazenly exposed self-loathing, clothed in 
superior mode and attitude maintained by pathetic 
tries to admire herself in other’s eyes.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017

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Robinson Jr. Avatar
December 23, 2017 at 2:20 PM
Very, very well done, CayCay! A rhythmic flow of mesmerizing thoughts of self-introspection. Great poetry! An instant fave for sure. Pure poetry, dear friend. Love and joy always.
Dietrich Avatar
December 3, 2017 at 4:15 PM
I was reading this one again to savor it.Congrats, Caycay.
Ashley Avatar
December 1, 2017 at 2:12 PM
CayCay, returning with congratulations on your win with your beautifully written poem. Warmest regards. ~Susan
Roper Avatar
November 30, 2017 at 5:51 PM
CayCay, ..Congratulations on your win Hugs Eve ~`*
Warrior Avatar
November 30, 2017 at 9:22 AM
WoW!!...well done CayCay...best of luck but I smell a winner...god bless...^WW^
Breedt Avatar
November 28, 2017 at 11:25 PM
Going deep here and word combinations are a delight. I know she would find a friend in you and boost her self esteem. As always, your perceptions and empathy so advanced.
Daniel Avatar
November 27, 2017 at 8:27 AM
Sad to see such people around, CayCay, pitiable indeed...thanks for visiting many of my poems:)
One Avatar
November 26, 2017 at 4:16 PM
This is a very deep take on the contest CayCay, A reflective take on the contest.. Good luck..
Ashley Avatar
November 25, 2017 at 7:51 PM
That's deep and sad CayCay. A beautifully expressed poem in well chosen words, interesting word combinations and a lovely rhythm that enhances your message of betrayal and false bravado. Your last line is brilliant! Best wishes in the contest!
Dietrich Avatar
November 25, 2017 at 7:17 PM
wow it's a deep one, And it says so much, Caycay. Very thoughtful phrasing with clever use of sound. Wasn't this a great challenge?
Gauthier Avatar
November 25, 2017 at 7:09 PM
Delightfully musical piece. Loved reading this fine poem, CayCay.
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