Brian Strand Poet Imagism

Spaces-September I

empty slides in the park



chatter fills the school bus

Gael Turnbull(1928-2004,a Scottish doctor-poet created the imagist Spaces form in his collection Briefly (1967) a two line poem with a larger than usual space 
Turnbull  called poems using his device ‘Spaces’, and noted of these ‘The visual “space” is,a pause or hesitation, even a temporary dislocation of attention’ .

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James Marshall Goff September 9, 2009 at 3:06 AM very much enjoy the total impact! Brian!...jim

James Peranteau September 2, 2009 at 3:22 AM Brian,..one of the saddest parts of summers end,...8 hours of stressing out if mine Noah is fine out of mine clutch ! Great write my friend ! james

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen September 1, 2009 at 3:48 PM Perfect! I read and see! Nice words, Brian. Regards, DAS-J

Charmaine Chircop September 1, 2009 at 1:50 PM education is important but yes we are creating robots of innocent little kids.......many empty slides,lack of fun for the little ones--well penned--love the title........--charma

Carrie Richards September 1, 2009 at 11:24 AM What a wonderful example of reading between the lines......perfectly said in this wonderful poem. ~ loved this! ~Carrie

Barbara Gorelick September 1, 2009 at 7:43 AM I was in an empty park yesterday... this is right on. as usual. BG

Christopher Higgins September 1, 2009 at 7:04 AM Yes the parks are starting to get lonely..feet are busy readying for the new school year...lovely description.

Doris Culverhouse September 1, 2009 at 6:29 AM Nicely done, thank you for your comments and congrats to you on your many wins!

Deirdre Omaidin September 1, 2009 at 4:04 AM This a an absolutely wonderful picture, any chance you could paint it too. Regards: Déirdre Ó Maidin

Sean Kelly September 1, 2009 at 3:46 AM Great poetic observation , Brian ....

Raul Moreno September 1, 2009 at 2:36 AM A balance of noise to no noise, nice work...Raul

Sara Kendrick September 1, 2009 at 2:21 AM Our children here have to start to school now at the end of July or first of August. They get spaced holidays in the year because teachers claimed that they lost too much over a long summer break. I like the way you expressed the empty park and the bus. Sara