Mandy Tams The Golden Girl Poet Rhyme

Space

Space that one I need to fill
Now empty but like a bitter pill
It’s hard to swallow it’s hard to accept
The space left when from my heart you crept

You crept away slowly through the years
You left me with the unshed tears
A cavernous space your legacy
That’s what you left when you left me.

But hold the press the story’s not told
Another is now in my arms to hold
The space is filled once more it seems
The space you left when you stole my dreams.

There is no space just room for two
I know you didn’t mean to be untrue
But life is harsh and it sometimes seems
That space is there to make new dreams.

© 25/02/2013
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Olusegun Arowolo March 7, 2013 at 12:27 AM Beautiful and excellent piece,Mandy.lovely write.Congratulations on your superb win.Kudos to you great friend.

Carol Eastman March 6, 2013 at 11:25 AM A great write. Congrats on your win.

Joseph May March 5, 2013 at 4:32 PM congrats on your win Mandy

Sm Koval March 5, 2013 at 12:15 PM Great poem! Thought provoking... and I agree with Caleb - those last two lines really were a "wow" moment for me! FABULOUS :)

Painted Hunter March 5, 2013 at 8:48 AM This is excellent. You really know how to end a poem. Nice Win!

Harry Horsman March 5, 2013 at 4:53 AM love your space, congrats

Scott Howard Myers The Gypsy King March 5, 2013 at 4:02 AM Thanks for sharing, great poem.

Donna Jones March 4, 2013 at 7:24 PM I hope your new dreams are wonderful...congratulations... Mandy Tams The Golden Girl March 5, 2013 at 2:16 AM They are Donna and thanks xx

Poet Destroyer A March 4, 2013 at 9:41 AM Mandy,, congratulations with your wonderful space-going poem in Susan's contest...xox~PD Mandy Tams The Golden Girl March 5, 2013 at 2:17 AM Thanks Pd xx

Harry Horsman March 4, 2013 at 8:49 AM this is amazing poetry, Mandy, congrats number one for me Mandy Tams The Golden Girl March 5, 2013 at 2:17 AM Thanks harry, you are such a support for me xx

Andrea Dietrich February 27, 2013 at 5:05 PM Mandy, I really like how you did Susan's topic on space. VERY nice. And so, you think I am very solitary? I think maybe you are right!! Mandy Tams The Golden Girl March 5, 2013 at 2:18 AM I think you are a brick Andy and I think I told you once before lol (brick = something good) xx

Debra Squyres February 27, 2013 at 12:29 PM I see so much character in these verses. There is always space for love and forgivness. Love where you took this from beginning heartache to a space for new dreams.... Mandy Tams The Golden Girl March 5, 2013 at 2:19 AM Thanks for that Debra xx

Harry Horsman February 27, 2013 at 12:52 AM sadness to happiness, such positivity.. lovely Mandy... Mandy Tams The Golden Girl March 5, 2013 at 2:19 AM Thanks harry, i always try to be poitive xx

David Williams February 26, 2013 at 1:44 PM Hi Mandy glad it all went well for you, I like family gatherings....David Mandy Tams The Golden Girl March 5, 2013 at 2:20 AM Thanks David xx

Connie Gildersleeve February 26, 2013 at 4:36 AM I really like the use of space in your poem. "Another is now in my arms." Space is filled not only within the heart but in the arms. Nicely done Mandy. Best wishes in the contest. Warm Smiles, Connie Mandy Tams The Golden Girl March 5, 2013 at 2:21 AM Thanks Connie, you always send warm smiles luv and I appreciate them xx

Joseph May February 25, 2013 at 8:29 PM great write Mandy...winning wishes Mandy Tams The Golden Girl March 5, 2013 at 2:20 AM Thanks Joseph xx

Donna Jones February 25, 2013 at 3:00 PM Wonderful story even if it is fiction..good luck Mandy Tams The Golden Girl March 5, 2013 at 2:21 AM Thanks Donna xx

Ilene Bauer February 25, 2013 at 2:56 PM love it, mandy! best of luck in the contest - this sounds like a winner to me. Mandy Tams The Golden Girl March 5, 2013 at 2:22 AM Thanks Ilene xx

Terry O'Leary February 25, 2013 at 12:55 PM Very nice, Mandy! Sad but deep... Terry Mandy Tams The Golden Girl March 5, 2013 at 2:15 AM Thanks Terry xx

David Williams February 25, 2013 at 11:34 AM Mandy well done I like it....any black eyes? lol.....David Mandy Tams The Golden Girl February 25, 2013 at 11:44 AM Hi and thanks David, not a black eye in sight a wonderful evening all rounds thanks, truly amazing xx

Eileen Manassian February 25, 2013 at 11:29 AM MANDY!!!!! Every line is so so replete with meaning and wonder! I LOVED THIS! Going into my favorites! :) Just a little observation...second stanza...third line, shouldn't that read YOUR legacy? ;) Mandy Tams The Golden Girl February 25, 2013 at 11:33 AM Thanks Eileen I have put it right and thanks for the eagle eye xx

Seren Roberts February 25, 2013 at 11:02 AM great words Hun....Seren Mandy Tams The Golden Girl February 25, 2013 at 11:33 AM hi sass I'm just about back in action xx