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Sound of Danger

I sense your presence, not seeing
Your shadow flitting about.
Without touching you, I can feel
The booming beats of your heart.
Your sudden scream makes my head throb.
I bite down with angry fangs.

Contest: Night Creatures, No. 2; Rattlesnake.
Written 1/17/15 by Isaiah Zerbst.

Copyright © Isaiah Zerbst | Year Posted 2015

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Kayod5 Kayode Date: 1/21/2015 11:06:00 PM This is excellent Isaiah,congrats on the win...huggs Login to Reply

Eve Roper Date: 1/21/2015 7:01:00 PM Isaiah, congratulations on your win, I like your personification. Eve Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 1/21/2015 2:22:00 PM wow, doing it from the snakes perspective. That was very creative. Congrats on your well deserved win. Login to Reply

Sara Kendrick Date: 1/21/2015 1:43:00 PM : ) !!! SK Login to Reply

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders Date: 1/21/2015 7:30:00 AM I love how you did yours, Isaiah! Congrats on your win...hugs, Rhonda Login to Reply

Teddy Kimathi Date: 1/20/2015 11:09:00 PM Congrats for your well-deserved WIN Isaiah! ;-) Login to Reply

Dr. Upma A. Sharma Date: 1/20/2015 9:24:00 PM loved this masterful write Isaiah!A perfect 7,, I m such a fan of snakes,, my husband can catch hold of these anytime but of course not the rattlesnake ! Congrats on big win! Login to Reply

Debbie Guzzi Date: 1/20/2015 7:15:00 PM I'm not a snake person LOL if I ever heard a rattler I'd run like willie coyote! Congrad's on your win. Light & love Login to Reply

Barbara Gorelick Date: 1/20/2015 4:17:00 PM Original...from the snakes perspective. Congrats..this is great. BG Login to Reply

John Lawless Date: 1/20/2015 3:47:00 PM Isaiah, a poem with a little "bite" to it. Great use of personification to add to the mystery. Login to Reply

Paul Callus Date: 1/20/2015 2:45:00 PM A very good poem written in the first person. The rattlesnake attacks on impulse...not planned. #7 Congrats on your fitting win, Isaiah! // paul Login to Reply

Jan Allison Date: 1/20/2015 2:14:00 PM Dropping back with my congratulations Isaiah:-) I really enjoyed this write:-) Hugs Jan xx Login to Reply

M. L. Kiser Date: 1/20/2015 2:07:00 PM Ouch! I suppose that's the only way a rattlesnake has of fighting back? Oh well, like all creatures; we should leave them be. A well done write! Login to Reply

Sandra Haight Date: 1/20/2015 12:55:00 PM Isaiah, congratulations on your nice win. I especially like the way you made your night creature speak as the observer rather than the observed. I will fear snakes even more now! Sandra Login to Reply

Emile Pinet Date: 1/18/2015 11:05:00 AM You have a quick wit and an enviable imagination. Emile. Login to Reply

Eileen Manassian Date: 1/17/2015 11:11:00 PM Wow...that's some write, Isaiah. Superb. Good luck in the contest.... Thanks for your visit to my work. :) Login to Reply

Charmaine Chircop Date: 1/17/2015 7:08:00 PM Without touching you i can feel the booming beat of your heart-That says so much,Excellent! Login to Reply

Jan Allison Date: 1/17/2015 7:04:00 PM Dark chilling imagery Isaiah. Good luck in the contest:-) Hugs jan xx Login to Reply