Isaiah Zerbst Poet Verse

Sound of Danger

I sense your presence, not seeing
Your shadow flitting about.
Without touching you, I can feel
The booming beats of your heart.
Your sudden scream makes my head throb.
I bite down with angry fangs.

Contest: Night Creatures, No. 2; Rattlesnake.
Written 1/17/15 by Isaiah Zerbst.

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Kayod5 Kayode January 21, 2015 at 11:06 PM This is excellent Isaiah,congrats on the win...huggs

Eve Roper January 21, 2015 at 7:01 PM Isaiah, congratulations on your win, I like your personification. Eve

Andrea Dietrich January 21, 2015 at 2:22 PM wow, doing it from the snakes perspective. That was very creative. Congrats on your well deserved win.

Sara Kendrick January 21, 2015 at 1:43 PM : ) !!! SK

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders January 21, 2015 at 7:30 AM I love how you did yours, Isaiah! Congrats on your win...hugs, Rhonda

Teddy Kimathi January 20, 2015 at 11:09 PM Congrats for your well-deserved WIN Isaiah! ;-)

Dr. Upma A. Sharma January 20, 2015 at 9:24 PM loved this masterful write Isaiah!A perfect 7,, I m such a fan of snakes,, my husband can catch hold of these anytime but of course not the rattlesnake ! Congrats on big win!

Debbie Guzzi January 20, 2015 at 7:15 PM I'm not a snake person LOL if I ever heard a rattler I'd run like willie coyote! Congrad's on your win. Light & love

Barbara Gorelick January 20, 2015 at 4:17 PM Original...from the snakes perspective. Congrats..this is great. BG

John Lawless January 20, 2015 at 3:47 PM Isaiah, a poem with a little "bite" to it. Great use of personification to add to the mystery.

Paul Callus January 20, 2015 at 2:45 PM A very good poem written in the first person. The rattlesnake attacks on impulse...not planned. #7 Congrats on your fitting win, Isaiah! // paul

Jan Allison January 20, 2015 at 2:14 PM Dropping back with my congratulations Isaiah:-) I really enjoyed this write:-) Hugs Jan xx

M. L. Kiser January 20, 2015 at 2:07 PM Ouch! I suppose that's the only way a rattlesnake has of fighting back? Oh well, like all creatures; we should leave them be. A well done write!

Sandra Haight January 20, 2015 at 12:55 PM Isaiah, congratulations on your nice win. I especially like the way you made your night creature speak as the observer rather than the observed. I will fear snakes even more now! Sandra

Emile Pinet January 18, 2015 at 11:05 AM You have a quick wit and an enviable imagination. Emile.

Eileen Manassian January 17, 2015 at 11:11 PM Wow...that's some write, Isaiah. Superb. Good luck in the contest.... Thanks for your visit to my work. :)

Charmaine Chircop January 17, 2015 at 7:08 PM Without touching you i can feel the booming beat of your heart-That says so much,Excellent!

Jan Allison January 17, 2015 at 7:04 PM Dark chilling imagery Isaiah. Good luck in the contest:-) Hugs jan xx