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Sound of Danger

I sense your presence, not seeing Your shadow flitting about. Without touching you, I can feel The booming beats of your heart. Your sudden scream makes my head throb. I bite down with angry fangs. Contest: Night Creatures, No. 2; Rattlesnake. Written 1/17/15 by Isaiah Zerbst.

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Kayod5 Kayode

Date: 1/21/2015 11:06:00 PM

This is excellent Isaiah,congrats on the win...huggs

Eve Roper

Date: 1/21/2015 7:01:00 PM

Isaiah, congratulations on your win, I like your personification. Eve

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/21/2015 2:22:00 PM

wow, doing it from the snakes perspective. That was very creative. Congrats on your well deserved win.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/21/2015 1:43:00 PM

: ) !!! SK

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 1/21/2015 7:30:00 AM

I love how you did yours, Isaiah! Congrats on your win...hugs, Rhonda

Teddy Kimathi

Date: 1/20/2015 11:09:00 PM

Congrats for your well-deserved WIN Isaiah! ;-)

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 1/20/2015 9:24:00 PM

loved this masterful write Isaiah!A perfect 7,, I m such a fan of snakes,, my husband can catch hold of these anytime but of course not the rattlesnake ! Congrats on big win!

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 1/20/2015 7:15:00 PM

I'm not a snake person LOL if I ever heard a rattler I'd run like willie coyote! Congrad's on your win. Light & love

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 1/20/2015 4:17:00 PM

Original...from the snakes perspective. Congrats..this is great. BG

John Lawless

Date: 1/20/2015 3:47:00 PM

Isaiah, a poem with a little "bite" to it. Great use of personification to add to the mystery.

Paul Callus

Date: 1/20/2015 2:45:00 PM

A very good poem written in the first person. The rattlesnake attacks on impulse...not planned. #7 Congrats on your fitting win, Isaiah! // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 1/20/2015 2:14:00 PM

Dropping back with my congratulations Isaiah:-) I really enjoyed this write:-) Hugs Jan xx

M. L. Kiser

Date: 1/20/2015 2:07:00 PM

Ouch! I suppose that's the only way a rattlesnake has of fighting back? Oh well, like all creatures; we should leave them be. A well done write!

Sandra Haight

Date: 1/20/2015 12:55:00 PM

Isaiah, congratulations on your nice win. I especially like the way you made your night creature speak as the observer rather than the observed. I will fear snakes even more now! Sandra