Richard Lamoureux Poet Free verse

Something

You have that face
That look
Is there something you want to tell me?
I know when you are pretending
I know when your smile doesn't meet your eyes
Maybe no one else will suspect a thing
You always have the right thing to say
But there is an underlying current
I can feel it
There is just something about a sad heart beating!

Really
I can take it
Is there something you want to tell me?
Just say it, don't worry about me breaking
I feel the shift
I am sure I am not mistaken
You are not living anymore
I see you skillfully going through the motions
Disguising your sad with perfect clothes
Holding onto small insignificant meanings
Not like when your laughter was better than breathing

I don't want you to be trapped by my forever
Is there something you want to tell me?
Is there someone whom you feel fully completes you?
Does he understand you the way that I used to?
I can't shake it 
This underlying feeling 
That you are just here and going through the motions
Unwilling to share your true emotions

I remember
I was there 
When you were fully you
Not half hearted and melancholy blue
You moved with a perfect kinda easy grace
That happy seems to have vanished without a trace
Damn girl, you were so amazing 
I miss how we occupied our own special space
Please, yes it is really okay
I need to hear what you have to say
Is there something you want to tell me?

Written June 29, 2015.
By: Richard Lamoureux

Mostly free verse but morphing to rhymes.

For Judy Konos's contest.

Fictional write with just a bit of truth from long ago.

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Brenda Rose August 3, 2015 at 9:25 AM A definite 7+ and winner, Richard. You never cease to amaze me. This insight into to the woman's lost love is told beautifully and a bit sad. Clever to use the line "Is there something you want to tell me?" to tie it all together". Thank you.

Mary Rotman July 28, 2015 at 7:41 PM Very emotional Richard Lamoureux July 28, 2015 at 11:12 PM Thanks Mary.;0)

Debbie Guzzi July 16, 2015 at 2:52 PM I can hear the concern loud & clear, sometimes we must realize a persons depression or reason for being blue is [not so simply] their own self? And as folks who care for them we really can not do anything. Light & Love Richard Lamoureux July 18, 2015 at 8:38 AM That is true, even though our heart aches for them.

Brian Baumgarn July 15, 2015 at 3:46 AM I agree wholeheartedly, Richard. I would pale at standing on a stage and acting but I was always comfortable standing up and playing trumpet for people. Writing is that way. We can put on a different face or look deep within someone else and imagine what they may be about. Richard Lamoureux July 15, 2015 at 7:50 AM ;0)

Brian Baumgarn July 14, 2015 at 2:35 AM It is a good write, and deserved a win, Richard. The lines, "I remember, I was there when you were fully you." They really tug at the heartstrings! I agree, I do fiction but pull on experience pretty frequently. Thanks for the great write. Brian Richard Lamoureux July 14, 2015 at 8:05 AM That is the great thing about writing, we can live many lives.

Skat A July 6, 2015 at 8:30 PM Richard, Congratulations on your win, SKAT love Richard Lamoureux July 7, 2015 at 9:21 AM Thanks SKAT

Kayod5 Kayode July 6, 2015 at 2:00 AM This is highly creative, congrats Richard...huggs Richard Lamoureux July 6, 2015 at 7:49 AM Much appreciated Kayode.

Lee Carter July 6, 2015 at 12:27 AM Enjoyed this Richard congrats! Richard Lamoureux July 6, 2015 at 7:48 AM Thanks Lee.

Dr. Upma A. Sharma July 5, 2015 at 10:53 PM Congrats on ur win Richard! This is so lovely I can well relate to this! Richard Lamoureux July 6, 2015 at 7:49 AM Thanks Upma.

Poet Destroyer A July 5, 2015 at 9:19 PM Richard Congrats on your win. LINDA Richard Lamoureux July 6, 2015 at 7:48 AM Thanks Linda.

Judy Konos July 5, 2015 at 9:17 AM Thank You for entering my contest. Richard Lamoureux July 6, 2015 at 7:47 AM My pleasure Judy.

Verlena S. Walker July 1, 2015 at 1:05 AM Nice Richard! Verlena Richard Lamoureux July 1, 2015 at 7:38 AM Thanks once again Verlena, I would love to here your thoughts in more detail. What does the piece make you feel?

Arthur Vaso June 30, 2015 at 9:58 PM There is something I want to tell you, and thats you nailed this one. We have all been there I think at some point, great write Richard. Richard Lamoureux July 1, 2015 at 12:51 AM Thanks, I was a little nervous to hear what you wanted to tell me!!! That's a load off my mind.;0)

Kp Nunez June 30, 2015 at 7:15 AM Very realistic. I was about to take the same approach but I think I will just enjoy yours. Blessings for the contest, Rick. hugs Richard Lamoureux June 30, 2015 at 7:23 AM Thanks for the visit and blessing Kim.

Andrea Dietrich June 29, 2015 at 10:39 PM richard you did amazingly well with this theme. It's a really hard one for me. I am drawn to a bunch of other challenges right now and not this one. I admire you for taking this one on so well! Richard Lamoureux June 29, 2015 at 10:50 PM It wasn't as hard as I initially expected. Thanks for commenting Andrea.

Casarah Nance June 29, 2015 at 10:03 PM It is easy to hide behind words we don't want to say...sometimes it takes a bit of encouragement to open up the gates. Richard Lamoureux June 29, 2015 at 10:52 PM Great comment, it is a poem within itself.

Richard D Seal June 29, 2015 at 7:36 PM Hi Rick, Sometimes the teller can't bring themselves to say what they want to say, but uses that silence to transmit impending bad/sad news so as to reduce the impact when it does come out. You have portrayed the fear yet longing to know the truth in this write so vividly. Take care, Richard Richard Lamoureux June 29, 2015 at 10:53 PM Hi Richard, it is always a pleasure to have you comment. Much appreciated my friend.

Tim Smith June 29, 2015 at 3:44 PM I didn't meant fighting....I wrote moving....lol...auto correct on my phone Richard Lamoureux June 29, 2015 at 4:12 PM Happens to me all the time.

Tim Smith June 29, 2015 at 1:21 PM Fighting piece Richard.... I too remember those days of just going through the motions Richard Lamoureux June 29, 2015 at 3:39 PM Thanks Tim.

Nette Onclaud June 29, 2015 at 1:09 PM i was hanging every word, rich...i felt your longing for 'the perfect moment'... yes, lovely!.. huggs Richard Lamoureux June 29, 2015 at 3:40 PM Hugs back Nette, so glad to be past those days.

Daisy Marie Yant June 29, 2015 at 11:12 AM WOW. Wrestle with this emotions sometimes myself...great read. Much Love Richard Lamoureux June 29, 2015 at 3:41 PM Thanks Daisy. A much appreciated comment and visit.

Eileen Manassian June 29, 2015 at 9:49 AM Very deep, Richard. So....full of emotions. It has an echo of my sonnet. Fancy that. Hope all is well. Hugs Richard Lamoureux June 29, 2015 at 10:15 AM I visited you every day and even on Facebook. Eileen Manassian June 29, 2015 at 10:04 AM Really? That's good to know. I haven't gotten too many visits while away. One wonders at times. I know what you write is true, though. Thanks!!! :) Richard Lamoureux June 29, 2015 at 10:01 AM Thankfully it is a fictional write. Welcome back! It's not the same without you here.

Njeri Hunjeri June 29, 2015 at 9:37 AM I love this! The emotions and feelings are well expressed. I Wish u the best in the contest. Good day Rick. Richard Lamoureux June 29, 2015 at 10:02 AM Thanks Njeri.;0)

Mama Bear June 29, 2015 at 9:12 AM Yes I want to tell you that I loved the piece Also want to tell you that I love you my son Mom Richard Lamoureux June 29, 2015 at 10:02 AM Have another read, it is now finished. I love you too mom.