Someone Who Used To Be You

When splendor of love spun dreams ecstatic
Musings of fantasy waltzed joyous themes
On blossoms of meadows in prime of spring
And giggles of streams donning green prairies

I felt your presence my eager beats crooned
When halo of the moon ravished our mood
As melodic rhythms inflamed doting hearts
And voice of hot passion blazed our romance

You were sweet life that I cheerfully claimed
And I was to you what your triumph meant
But feelings euphoric soon lost their edge
When in winds of change vows of youth drifted

I saw you go there where lonesome souls cry
Where emotions despised strife of pale sighs
When day’s silence often filled awkward void
And haze of nights we spent gazing gray skies

When dawns soon arose enveloped in shroud
Love too got masked, cloaked in stygian clouds
And allure, once acclaimed, began to fade
As contempt of sameness dwindled our flames

As you leave this dream, dear, you know it too
No longer the birds choose to croon your tune
They are searching someone they loved and knew
The one they once wooed, who used to be you

January 27, 2021
Poem of the day on January 28, 2020
Placed 1st: Watered-down juice poetry contest
Sponsor: Edward Ibeh
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George Avatar
July 28, 2022 at 7:20 AM
I understand that this poen is a triple winner ! I am not at all surprised ! This is such a gem of a poem stating how allure, once acclaimed fades and the flame of love dwindles with the passage of time. Beautifully presented in your inimitable style, Vijay!
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February 26, 2021 at 2:16 AM
This is beautiful! I don't think I have seen your poems before but I am speechless. This is a masterpiece. Faving it for sure! Congratulations on your top placement in the best new poems list, very much deserved.
Pandit Avatar
February 26, 2021 at 4:56 AM
Glad you stopped by with your lovely comments, BJ. Much appreciate your visit--many thanks. And a very special thank you for the FAVE.
Ouma Avatar
February 25, 2021 at 10:51 PM
Wow! Such a good read and congratulations!
Pandit Avatar
February 26, 2021 at 4:55 AM
Much appreciate Beryl--many thanks.
B. Avatar
February 23, 2021 at 2:44 PM
Congratulations on you top win, Vijay.. Really enjoyed your exquisite masterpiece.. Absolutely breathtaking! Many blessings my friend..
Pandit Avatar
February 24, 2021 at 12:10 PM
Much appreciate your visit and comments, Robertina--many thanks.
Costales Avatar
February 23, 2021 at 12:19 PM
All my best and glad I opened to read your poem a lovely dedication to “someone who used to be...your sweet life.
Pandit Avatar
February 23, 2021 at 2:42 PM
Thank you Josefina--much appreciate your visit and comments.
Cunningham Avatar
February 22, 2021 at 4:42 AM
Back to say congrats Vijay on being top of the best poems list. Tom
Pandit Avatar
February 22, 2021 at 5:27 AM
Thank you Tom. Much appreciate your return visit.
Hankins Avatar
February 21, 2021 at 5:10 PM
My heartiest congrats to you on having your poem top the list of New Best Poems. What an honor; but what a poem, also!!!
Pandit Avatar
February 22, 2021 at 5:26 AM
Much appreciate your visit and kind remarks. Many, many thanks.
Marcum Wong Avatar
February 21, 2021 at 9:58 AM
Congratulations on having this wonderful poem at the top of her new best poems list my friend! Blessings xxoo
Pandit Avatar
February 21, 2021 at 2:04 PM
Thank you Connie--much appreciate my friend. Hope you are doing well.
Downing  Avatar
February 19, 2021 at 5:58 AM
Vijay, HUGE CONGRATS on your top win and on being 1st place on 100 best new poems... I’m smiling for you my friend :)
Pandit Avatar
February 19, 2021 at 7:21 AM
Thank you my friend for stopping by again with your delightful comments. Always a joy, when you visit.
Gentile Avatar
February 15, 2021 at 4:12 AM
You have achieved the triple Crown with this beautiful write Vijay, Congrats on reaching Number 1 on the best new poem list! So very well deserved!! Happy Monday !
Pandit Avatar
February 15, 2021 at 6:45 AM
So very kind of you Mike. Much appreciate--many thanks.
Radhakrishna Avatar
February 11, 2021 at 5:42 AM
Brilliant poem with a top win!! Congrats Vijay!!
Pandit Avatar
February 11, 2021 at 2:14 PM
Thank you Krish--much appreciate.
Kulkarni Avatar
February 8, 2021 at 9:06 PM
Beautifully penned Vijay! Congratulations on your win!!
Pandit Avatar
February 10, 2021 at 7:34 AM
Much appreciate Smita--many thanks.
Dietrich Avatar
February 8, 2021 at 2:31 PM
I see this is very high on the best new poems list as well. Big congrats, Vijay.
Pandit Avatar
February 10, 2021 at 7:33 AM
Thank you Andrea--much appreciate.
Michael Avatar
February 2, 2021 at 1:03 PM
Congratulations Vijay Pandit on POTD...Another sweet write from a bountiful tree...
Pandit Avatar
February 2, 2021 at 2:32 PM
Thank you Arturo--much appreciate.
Marcum Wong Avatar
February 2, 2021 at 10:09 AM
A belated Congratulations for this lovely POTD poem Vijay. It is difficult to keep up these days. Blessings xxoo
Pandit Avatar
February 2, 2021 at 2:32 PM
Thank you Connie. Much appreciate. Please take care of yourself--hope you will find some relief as time goes by.
Allison Avatar
February 1, 2021 at 11:43 AM
a top win and potd, many congrats Vijay sorry i missed commenting on this gem sooner:-( hugs jan xx
Pandit Avatar
February 1, 2021 at 1:30 PM
Much appreciate Jan. So very kind of you to stop by with your lovely feedback. Many many thanks.
Blodgett Avatar
February 1, 2021 at 9:34 AM
"Contempt of Sameness" might have been your metaphoric title! You so aptly portray the erosion that exists when one loses the appreciation of heart. So beautiful Vijay!
Pandit Avatar
February 1, 2021 at 9:46 AM
Much appreciate Lonna--many many thanks.
Lamoureux Avatar
February 1, 2021 at 7:00 AM
A double win, impressive on both counts. I’m pleased to see you honoured in this way. Congrats Rick.
Pandit Avatar
February 1, 2021 at 9:45 AM
Thank you Richard--much appreciate.
Agustin Avatar
February 1, 2021 at 4:37 AM
Wow! Congrats! So delightful and delighting from the start til the end... especially this line I can relate to: "When in winds of change vows of youth drifted..." Thanks for sharing your talent. God bless you.
Pandit Avatar
February 1, 2021 at 5:50 AM
Glad you stopped by Beata. Much appreciate--many thanks for the kind remarks.
Seeker Avatar
January 31, 2021 at 6:23 PM
Back again to congratulate you on your top win! This poem, already a favourite, is simply superb! :)
Pandit Avatar
February 1, 2021 at 5:49 AM
Thank you US--much appreciate your return visit and treasure your FAVE..
Y. Avatar
January 31, 2021 at 3:29 PM
Hi Vijay, I'm just coming back to say congratulations on your top win. It was well deserved. Have a good evening:-) Alexis
Pandit Avatar
February 1, 2021 at 5:48 AM
Thank you my friend--much appreciate.
Mcintosh Avatar
January 31, 2021 at 12:58 PM
Congrats on your wonderful win :) God bless you with much love and many prayers, Gina
Pandit Avatar
January 31, 2021 at 1:27 PM
Thank you Gina--much appreciate your return visit.
Goldsmith Avatar
January 31, 2021 at 12:14 PM
Coming back with another "Congratulations" on this win. I enjoyed reading it again. Today, enjoy your win with blessings................
Pandit Avatar
January 31, 2021 at 1:27 PM
Thank you for your return visit, Paula--much appreciate.
Ibeh Avatar
January 31, 2021 at 11:51 AM
Now I can see why this masterpiece won you POTD, Vijay. Outstanding! Heartiest congratulations on your first place win in my contest! I have to FAV this....
Pandit Avatar
January 31, 2021 at 1:26 PM
A special treat from you to receive a FAVE, Edward. Much appreciate your kind remarks. Many thanks for your comments and many more for holding contests.
Melugin Avatar
January 30, 2021 at 8:08 PM
VJ...Your pen is on fire!
Pandit Avatar
January 31, 2021 at 4:24 AM
Glad you stopped by Chuck. Much appreciate--many thanks.
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