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Bound for your distant home you were leaving new lands In an hour as sad as I’ve known I wept over your hands. My hands were numb and cold, still trying to restrain you, whom my hurt told never to end this pain. But you snatched your lips away from our bitterest kiss. You invoked another place than the dismal exile of this. You said, ‘When we meet again, in the shadow of palm-trees, we shall kiss, in a love without pain, under cloudless infinities.’ But there, alas, where the sky shines with blue radiance, where palm-tree shadows lie on the waters glittering dance,

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Date: 3/29/2016 4:00:00 PM
Gracias *Linlane..realy Appreciate the feedback. .I noticed my mistake over there..I guess its my love for suspence that I forgot to check it out..
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Date: 3/26/2016 5:44:00 PM
You have this going in a great direction, but it seems incomplete. Please keep it going....Your phrases in the last verse are wonderful, but what happens in the palm tree shadows that glitter dance on the water? You leave me hanging, wondering if you pine for her there, or does she return to you there. Love's Bitter Kiss
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