Sandra Adams Poet Rhyme

Somber Eyes

Last May (one week before Mother's day) my neighbor's son lost his life through peer pressure and a mistake! He always was so full of laughter and love. His mother hasn't been the same since, as one would expect in this situation!  


              a mother cries;
        within the blush of morning light
      night tucks itself beneath the reddish rise
        as fragile life takes flight
  eyes closed in darkness, now only a cricket sings
  her world slowly crumbled the day he got his wings
    her dreams shatter...the church bell rings...
  she gathers herself but hides within somber eyes







June 18, 2019    
Crumbling Rhyme Contest
Sponsored by Dear Heart~

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Constance La France June 30, 2019 at 5:53 PM Sandra congratulations on your win in my writing challenge with this wonderful and emotional write and sorry for my delay in visiting ~ Sandra Adams June 30, 2019 at 6:16 PM Thank you Dear Heart and thank you for hosting the contest :) hugs

Jan Allison June 29, 2019 at 6:40 PM i have tears as a young manx lad committed suicide recently and his funeral was on Friday he was only 20, absolutely heartbreaking poem Sandra congrats on your win I am sure your neighbour will be touched by your words. hugs Jan xx Sandra Adams June 29, 2019 at 6:45 PM sorry for your loss Jan....so many young are either caught in the drug addiction and dying or committing suicide as an escape... i drive a school bus so have been touched by many! I showed his mom the poem when i wrote it and she cried and then asked me to send it to her so she could print it out and hang it somewhere! hugs Sandy

Susan Ashley June 25, 2019 at 7:47 PM Your poem is breathtaking in its sad beauty, Sandra. Such potent imagery expresses a Mother’s pain exquisitely. Your poem touches the reader very deeply. Congratulations on your wonderful win. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan Sandra Adams June 26, 2019 at 6:15 AM Thank you, it was a tough one to write! hugs

Jeanne Mcgee June 25, 2019 at 1:43 PM This is so so amazing. Lovely writing that just sweeps you in to the grief. Well deserved win. Congratulations Sandra. Sandra Adams June 25, 2019 at 2:02 PM Thank you for the read and your kind comment...I showed the poem to my neighbor and made her cry, i told her it was what i see behind her smiles....her eyes speak

Andrea Dietrich June 25, 2019 at 11:45 AM This is SO good. Congrats on the win, Sandy. Your writing is as amazing as ever. Just think of all the beatiful poems you could have written the past few years you have been away!! (I'm going up for my dad's funeral very soon now. Just doing lots of Soup before my sister arrives to take me up to WA) Have a great week, my friend.

John Hamilton June 21, 2019 at 10:04 PM Yeah so sad, I have to start reading something happy, but this is a special write! Sandra Adams June 21, 2019 at 10:29 PM It was all I could think of for the challenge on crumbling... If it didn’t have to rhyme my muse would have gone somewhere else. I enjoy challenges but I will admit rhyme to me is like a little child trying to color within the lines :)

John Gondolf June 21, 2019 at 6:40 AM Nicely written, Sandra, I can feel the deep emotion in this poem. Best of luck in the contest. John Sandra Adams June 21, 2019 at 7:19 AM thank you John, my muse has been sleeping for 3 long years, she is yawning bits of poetry now....

Gordon Mcconnell June 20, 2019 at 3:52 PM Fine write Sandra, full of sympathy and care of the heart. Very nice rhyme and flow too. Sandra Adams June 21, 2019 at 6:16 AM thank you for your visit and kind words :)

Craig Cornish June 20, 2019 at 1:44 PM Truly poignant expression Sandy Sandra Adams June 20, 2019 at 2:23 PM Thank you Craig and my muse thanks you for encouraging her to sing! She hasn't shut up in days lol