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Soaring Sapphires!

Soaring sapphires Filling the sky with glow… Shinning happiness Entry For “firework” Sponsored by Deborah Guzzi

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Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 7/4/2010 11:16:00 AM

Very nice Adeleke and good luck in the contest.. admire your spirit ..just read Constance's blog .. hope all is OK with u two ... some ladies mind the MA thing.. but not this Soup Mummy ..with luv from the "Sweetheart" in Hawaii..

Date: 7/2/2010 2:43:00 PM

Good use of imagery for a creative view. Best wishes in the contest. Keep on writing! Thank you for your kind comment. Karen

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 7/2/2010 12:19:00 PM

hey there sweet gal! you have capital letters (no capitalization or punctuation) and my dear you have 3 actions aim for 1 action with a related emotional response in line 3 "1 n hon...shining..) yest best not to have verb in line 3...love the jewel concept & the emtion in line 3..line 2 is the best line and the cut from 2 to 3 is very good!

Canny Amah

Date: 7/2/2010 10:54:00 AM

Leke, your high-pitch imagery, in this haiku, "Soaring Sapphires", as potent as it appears, makes a good case for nature & creation … one only imagines … imagines … & imagines … wishing you the greatest fireworker! Canny

De R

Date: 7/2/2010 9:29:00 AM

Beautiful imagery in your wonderful haiku! "Soaring sapphires" this is an excellent metaphor for fireworks. Good luck in the contest! Emily:)

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 7/2/2010 8:25:00 AM

Gems these fireworks are indeed, Adeleke! Great image and it gives the reader a joyful feeling. Nicely done - best wishes in Deborah's contest. Love, "Ma"