Soaring Sapphires!

Soaring sapphires
Filling the sky with glow…
Shinning happiness

 Entry For “firework”
Sponsored by Deborah Guzzi
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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July 4, 2010 at 11:16 AM
Very nice Adeleke and good luck in the contest.. admire your spirit ..just read Constance's blog .. hope all is OK with u two ... some ladies mind the MA thing.. but not this Soup Mummy ..with luv from the "Sweetheart" in Hawaii..
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July 2, 2010 at 2:43 PM
Good use of imagery for a creative view. Best wishes in the contest. Keep on writing! Thank you for your kind comment. Karen
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July 2, 2010 at 12:19 PM
hey there sweet gal! you have capital letters (no capitalization or punctuation) and my dear you have 3 actions aim for 1 action with a related emotional response in line 3 "1 n hon...shining..) yest best not to have verb in line 3...love the jewel concept & the emtion in line 3..line 2 is the best line and the cut from 2 to 3 is very good!
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July 2, 2010 at 10:54 AM
Leke, your high-pitch imagery, in this haiku, "Soaring Sapphires", as potent as it appears, makes a good case for nature & creation … one only imagines … imagines … & imagines … wishing you the greatest fireworker! Canny
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July 2, 2010 at 9:29 AM
Beautiful imagery in your wonderful haiku! "Soaring sapphires" this is an excellent metaphor for fireworks. Good luck in the contest! Emily:)
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July 2, 2010 at 8:25 AM
Gems these fireworks are indeed, Adeleke! Great image and it gives the reader a joyful feeling. Nicely done - best wishes in Deborah's contest. Love, "Ma"
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