John Gondolf Poet Rhyme

So Close Yet Out of Reach

Across the room her face shines bright
   while talking with her friends;
her presence fills me with delight
   with beauty that transcends.
She caught my eye right from the start,
but feelings that I can’t impart.
      She caught my eye…
         she caught my eye
   but knows not what is in my heart.

Across the room her face shines bright
   as feelings I conceal;
she thinks me as a friend alright
   not knowing how I feel.
I’m just a friend; we talk of life;
our busy lives so full and rife.
      I’m just a friend…
         I’m just a friend
   which fills my very soul with strife.

Across the room her face shines bright
   so close yet out of reach;
to woo her just would not be right,
   and love would be a breach.
To someone else her life belongs,
and I will not commit these wrongs.
      To someone else…
         to someone else
   she walks away; I sing sad songs.



April 21, 2018

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Anne-Lise Andresen August 31, 2019 at 3:05 PM - Congratulations on your lovely winning poem, John :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) John Gondolf August 31, 2019 at 5:39 PM Thanks so much, Anne-Lise, I appreciate it. Hugs, John

Silent One August 29, 2019 at 4:07 PM Oh, the one that got away John... Congratulations on your placement in the contest.. John Gondolf August 30, 2019 at 4:52 AM Thanks, SO, I appreciate it. And thanks for hosting the contest. John

Euni- verse July 18, 2019 at 7:28 PM Wow, this is amazing! I love how you had lines that repeat for every stanza. It added all the more to the overall impact of the poem. Would love to write one of this style myself. :) John Gondolf July 19, 2019 at 9:46 AM Thank you, Eunice, I'm glad you enjoyed it. This form is called a Trijan Refrain which I found on Shadow Poetry; they have a good explanation. I have written several other poems using this form but have only seen one other writer on PS use it. Thanks for taking time to read it. John

Juliet Ligon May 1, 2018 at 7:28 PM A very relatable poem. I enjoy your fluid style. John Gondolf May 2, 2018 at 4:26 AM Thank you for your comments, Juliet, and thanks for taking the time to read my poetry. John

Susan Ashley April 30, 2018 at 7:20 PM John, I'm returning with well deserved congratulations for your excellent win with your gorgeous and tender poem.. Warmest wishes, my friend.. John Gondolf May 1, 2018 at 9:10 AM Thank you so much my friend, I appreciate it. John

Line Gauthier April 30, 2018 at 4:09 PM A lovely poem, John. Congrats on your well deserved win. John Gondolf April 30, 2018 at 7:04 PM Thanks so much, Line, I appreciate it.

Sandra Haight April 30, 2018 at 4:04 PM Oh, this poem is so beautiful, John. I love the form you used and you did it so well. So heartfelt and wonderfully written. Congrats on your well-deserved podium win! Sandra :) John Gondolf April 30, 2018 at 4:08 PM Thank you, Sandra, i appreciate it. Your support means a great deal to me. John

Jerry Hackett April 30, 2018 at 6:21 AM Very nice, the best. John Gondolf April 30, 2018 at 7:03 AM Thanks so much, Jerry, I appreciate your comments and taking time to read my poetry. John

Winged Warrior April 30, 2018 at 6:18 AM Beautifully done my friend...congrats on your win...stay in the poetic light...^WW^ John Gondolf April 30, 2018 at 6:56 AM Thank, WW, I appreciate your comments and visit.

Susan Gentry April 30, 2018 at 6:12 AM Unrequited love... an awesome poem, well written, can feel the pain building. Congratulations on your win. John Gondolf April 30, 2018 at 6:52 AM Thanks so much, Susan, I appreciate your comments. Glad you enjoyed my poem.

Beautiful Scars April 30, 2018 at 5:53 AM Can't get more beautiful than this dear John, it really spoke to my heart, great poem! thank you and congratulations on your placement :)-luloo John Gondolf April 30, 2018 at 5:59 AM Thank you so much, Luloo, I'm glad you liked my poem and thank you for host the contest. John

Rhoda Tripp April 29, 2018 at 8:15 PM I love the unique form of this rhyme, especially the repeating verses. You have done the form a great justice. Very cool. John Gondolf April 29, 2018 at 8:31 PM Thanks so much, Rhoda. Glad to see you back, I was starting to worry. John

Andrea Dietrich April 27, 2018 at 8:44 PM Oh how thrilling. You found our Seaside Lament!!! John Gondolf April 29, 2018 at 8:30 PM It was a surprise when I found it; I enjoyed reading one of your earlier writes. John

Carolyn Devonshire April 27, 2018 at 2:26 PM Sometimes those who are "just friends" can inspire the most meaningful love of all, John. For this, perhaps a happy song? Enjoyed reading; you have a nice, clear writing style that captures the reader's attention and keeps it throughout. Hugs, Carolyn John Gondolf April 27, 2018 at 4:36 PM Carolyn, thanks so much for taking the time to read more of my writing, I appreciate it. It is true that "friends" can have a very meaningful love but in this poem his feelings go beyond friendship; but perhaps you are right, if he dared to cross the line it might be a most meaningful love.

Andrea Dietrich April 21, 2018 at 5:45 PM John, Jan herself would be SO proud of you for this poem. I used to be friends with the Jan who created this form. Her last name escapes me now. It's not the Jan of Soup. Anyway, I recall writing this form a few times after she introduced it to our group. I wonder how she is doing today and if she ever goes online and sees people using her beautiful form. John Gondolf April 21, 2018 at 6:00 PM Thanks so much, Andrea, Jan’s last name is Turner. When I was researching the form I found a great explanation on Shadow Poetry and one of the examples they gave was a poem called Seaside Lament which the two of you wrote together in 2006...small world. John

Nette Onclaud April 21, 2018 at 5:12 PM to restrain one's self from a love that cannot be is utterly painful... marvelously handled; wow, john... huggs John Gondolf April 21, 2018 at 6:23 PM Nette, thanks so much for your wonderful comment, I appreciate it. John

Pashang Salehi April 21, 2018 at 2:22 PM I know the feeling... We all have some form of confessions, myself included... Beautiful. Pashang Salehi April 26, 2018 at 1:08 AM Always... John Gondolf April 21, 2018 at 2:54 PM Pashang, thanks for your comments and visit. John

Susan Ashley April 21, 2018 at 12:34 PM How utterly beautiful, John. A gorgeous heartfelt expression of unrequited love and the poetry form you used showcases your lovely poem splendidly.. I love the tender refrains.. your poetic lines strummed my heartstrings.. Warmest wishes, my friend.. John Gondolf April 21, 2018 at 1:21 PM Thank you so much for your wonderful comment, Susan, your thoughts and encouragement mean a great deal to me. This poem was inspired by the song “You Don’t Know Me” which I heard on the way to work several days ago. John