Snowstorm Haiku

searching through snowdrifts lone sparrow flashes over thoughts of survival

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/28/2010 2:17:00 PM

Hey, this is quite good too. I see you have posted several haiku recently. I love haiku and am set now on reading all of them! Luv, Andrea

Fabiyas M V

Date: 12/20/2010 8:05:00 PM

Very sweet scene,friend.Your image brings to mind a lot of thoughts.

Constance La France

Date: 12/20/2010 6:00:00 PM

So "vivid" I think it is "magical"~~

Deb Radke

Date: 12/20/2010 3:51:00 PM

Oh very good. This is exactly what it must be like for birds in the north. I especially like the placement of your lines. It feels like a bird flying, having to into the snowbanks to search for food. Very good haiku.

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 12/20/2010 3:33:00 PM

I think sparrow is the only animal we see in this snowy season. Nice observation, HG, with good images. Soup mail!!!!!

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 12/20/2010 2:55:00 PM

Oh yes, I agree with Robert. This haiku has beautiful images. Well done, Jimbo! Hope you have a merry Christmas. Love, Carolyn

Robert Pettit

Date: 12/20/2010 2:49:00 PM

An excellent example of a quality haiku.