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Snowbound

It was official. There would be no school today due to heavy snow. We heard it on the radio, during the early morning show, while Mom was preparing our breakfast. Mom sighed and dropped her head when it was announced while we danced with jubilation around the kitchen table shouting “No school today. We can play all day!!” Little did we know this excitement would be short-lived. nose-prints frozen on a windowpane--- snowflakes dance A hearty breakfast was followed by watching some cartoons. The rest of the morning was spent playing in our rooms. The weather outside deteriorated into the afternoon as our morning’s jubilant joy was soon depleted. Our longing to play outside was denied us and we found ourselves quickly bored. A day out or school was not meant to be stuck inside looking out at the falling snow…or so we deemed.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 2/10/2013 2:41:00 PM
I really like the Haiku of this winning work..Congrats...Sara
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Date: 2/7/2013 10:48:00 AM
Debra, Congratulations on your winning "mixed up poem." Have yourself a nice day~ :-) xox~PD
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Date: 2/6/2013 10:45:00 AM
This is a fun one! I very much enjoyed reading it :) Congrats on a wonderful win!
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Date: 2/6/2013 3:56:00 AM
Big congrats and what a pity you didn't get out Debs xx
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Date: 2/5/2013 6:49:00 PM
I was as disappointed as you when I got to the end and you didn't get to go out! Congrad's on your win and please DO write another for Spring contest?
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Date: 2/5/2013 6:34:00 PM
Debra congrats on your win.
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Date: 2/5/2013 2:40:00 PM
Might I suggest bring the WHOLE write into the present tense? It will make it even more immediate and involving for the reader and mesh better with the haiku concept. [even though the haiku MOMENT is in the past we reveal it as if we were there in the MOMENT] Light & Love
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Date: 2/5/2013 3:01:00 PM
I'm not sure how to do that Debbie...asking for help.
Date: 1/30/2013 11:04:00 PM
hmmm, I guess you didn't like reading a book? haha. WHen I was a child my mother could not pull me away from my nancy drew books and I would rather do anything than have to go to school. But yes, I can remember loving those winter sports as well. This was awesome, Debra. I think you rocked your haiku too.
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Date: 1/16/2013 7:56:00 PM
Love the haiku inside this wonderful story. We seem to be getting nothing but snow and getting so tired of shoveling. love phylv3wt
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Date: 1/16/2013 5:07:00 PM
By jove I think you've got it! My only thought would be I don't feel the word tiny is needed in the haiku [but don't worry over it...even with a big nose I don't think you'd get a BIG nose print ;) :) and only a kid would do that..] then you'd have short/long/short GREAT job on your new form! Light & Love
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Date: 1/16/2013 2:20:00 PM
Louisiana snowbound? Am I just ignorant? I've been sick with the flu. Inside just suits me fine. :)
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Debra Squyres
Date: 1/16/2013 3:06:00 PM
Sorry to hear you have had the flu...I had it earlier in December...just now really feeling like me again. No we were not Snowboud, but schools were out due to ice on the roads. Wishing you a speedy recovery !!
Date: 1/16/2013 1:58:00 PM
I really was excited too when I was just a kid and school was cancelled due to snow, but I couldn't understand then that sometimes it was just too bad outside to go and play...to a child that is torture! Your poem shows this perfectly my friend, I especially enjoyed the cute Haiku you put in it to bring a special edge to your poem! Is this for Debbie's contest. If so, its a great entry! Awesome Work!!
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Date: 1/16/2013 12:33:00 PM
Nice poem Deb; I like snow. I know all about snow. I lived in Chicago for 38 years. I just love to see it fall and it's all white. Thanks for sharing and reading my poem. Lucilla
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