Snow Storm

Ice aligns us for a stretch, witness to This furrow of tears in me that Winter falls with you Our footprints press for assurance in the snow But will with this night lead out and go So the hearth that warms the outside of the window Be beneath your skin and spread my heartache's glow On you, darling — on you. Will you remember This heart as another passing Winter? And to our season's mum Too old within our sun Now a clothed morning bartering — 'Lest the green clover under also be seen, melting.

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Alesia Leach

Date: 5/23/2025 5:04:00 PM

This aches so quietly--like watching love dissolve through frost-laced glass. "Will you remember / This heart as another passing Winter?" absolutely pierced me. The longing is beautiful, and the imagery lingers like breath on a cold pane.

Robert Waltrip

Date: 1/22/2025 9:38:00 PM

Great imagery and craftsmanship!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 1/7/2025 4:56:00 AM

- Even in a snowstorm... heart is warm, Paige :) - Lovely poem :) - hugs

Ink Empress

Date: 1/7/2025 4:54:00 AM

This is so creatively done and well delivered dear sweet paige! I absolutely love this! I especially love the line “ Will you remember This heart as another passing Winter?” what a most evocative line that is! It must be snowing now where you are at? I see lots of snow posts on social media right now. Hope 2025 treats you and your loved ones kind! Sending you light always

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/6/2025 8:39:00 PM

This is very nice. There is a contrast in it that you could work into a triolet for that one contest if you put your mind to it!

Paige Hind
Date: 1/8/2025 11:14:00 AM

Thanks for the kind suggestion. Usually when I'm writing like from the heart, I just leave all else alone in a work after it's completed though....just my thing. I may write a triolet if I get inspired for the contest...if not, well, I will remember your support, dear Andrea!

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 1/6/2025 5:28:00 AM

Your imagery is astounding. There is great feeling in this poem.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 1/5/2025 11:48:00 PM

Spreading your heart's glow beneath your lover's skin is such beautiful imagery, Paige. Such depth of meaning here. Thank you for sharing and for your visit to my page. Hope your new year is off to a great start.

Christuraj Alex

Date: 1/5/2025 8:39:00 PM

"So the hearth that warms the outside of the window Be beneath your skin and spread my heartache's glow" - Need of an intimate relationship is very beautifully depicted. Grand work.

Sotto Poet

Date: 1/5/2025 8:18:00 PM

Great poem Paige, revolves around the interplay of love, memory, and the passage of time as represented through the seasons, particularly winter.