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SNOW BIRD In the dead of winter comes great beauty, with broody storms and the elegant snow. The hoarfrost spears hang icy and fluty, like aliens in guise as they stretch and grow. Crisp raw are the branches rasping the sky, as wind comes in a bluster to disturb. The shadow creatures den under the sigh, from the deadweight of snow they perturb. The beauty is sparse and simply at peace, a waltz in winter that comes on the fly. The white blizzard storm, we know it will cease, stopped by the echo of red bird’s soft cry. Ruby in starlight with ice on his wing, red bird dreams of Sun and the thaw in spring. December 5th, 2019 Your Best Sonnet July-December, 2019 Poetry Contest Sponsored by: John Hamilton

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Date: 1/14/2020 2:48:00 AM
Great imagery!
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Edlynn Nau
Date: 1/14/2020 1:13:00 PM
Thank you!
Date: 1/12/2020 3:51:00 PM
Edlynn stopping to visit and I am glad I did with this beauty. Like Connie said in her comment about the Cardinal. It is a beautiful bird and you do him justice in this write. Hope you are well and no fires near you. God bless you.
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Edlynn Nau
Date: 1/12/2020 5:09:00 PM
I was JUST THINKING BOUT YOU. How are you.. PS mail me a note! Thank you Michael! This was fun to write with the contrast of white cold winter and red warm bird. No fire until June (so sick of living like a Nomad)? If we are lucky. No matter PGE is busy turning off our power 9 days at a time. Aren’t you in Upper State NY? No real bad blizzards yet? Well, you know that snowy state of mind and I was wishing you all the hope through it. I will go look and see if you have new things for me to read! How is the music going?
Date: 1/11/2020 7:08:00 PM
Love the classic feel and touch of this sonnet, Edlynn. That redbird is such a symbol of winter, even as he and we sing the song of Spring. Beautiful! Thanks, Gershon
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Edlynn Nau
Date: 1/11/2020 8:39:00 PM
Thank-you so much for stopping by and giving it a read. One day, I hope I get to see a real cardinal for myself!
Date: 1/10/2020 5:51:00 PM
Wow Edlynn, this sonnet is gorgeous! I never think of winter without thinking about the beautiful cardinal. I am sure this gem will be a top winner. New year blessings my friend. xxoo
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Edlynn Nau
Date: 1/10/2020 6:10:00 PM
Such encouraging words. I am with you on the cardinal. Something about those crimson feathers, contrasted by the snow, that gives one hope, and brings us cheer. The poem placed Third. I was thrilled since I rarely enter contests (but was encouraged to enter this one). I just got it in under the wire and was not expecting to even place. Pretty exciting. I don’t expect peeps to much like things done the ole classical way. I’m just learning so I stick to the rules. Ha ha.
Date: 1/1/2020 8:03:00 PM
Edlynn, such a nice sonnet, classically styled (which I like), and with the hopeful, happy Spring thaw finale. Best of the New Year to you, Gershon
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Edlynn Nau
Date: 1/1/2020 8:32:00 PM
Awwwww! Thank you so much Gershon. I owe you and John a read and I will get around to it soon. Sometimes, you’d love to stop the world, catch up, and start it whirling again. Lol! :-)
Date: 12/25/2019 11:53:00 PM
I love your words and phrases: broody storm, hoarfrost, fluty, a waltz in winter, branches rasping the sky. The line "Ruby in starlight with ice on his wing" just rolls off the tongue. And don't we all dream of sun and the thaw in spring? A gorgeous write. Please be encouraged to write more sonnets, yours are just beautiful. A fave for me! Hugs, John
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Edlynn Nau
Date: 12/26/2019 12:35:00 AM
Oh I am tearing up and I don’t usually! You are encouraging me and I have felt discouraged by the lack of support by people in general(not here)! They don’t know the work involved in getting everything in a nutshell. People always want poetry for weddings, funerals, cards, tributes & the rest of the time, they won’t read it! Nevertheless, we can say a lot in a few words!
Date: 12/16/2019 5:39:00 PM
A beautiful sonnet Edlynn, my first time reading you, very impressive write congrats on a fine win!
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Edlynn Nau
Date: 12/16/2019 11:49:00 PM
What? I placed? I better go look! Thank you. I just adore writing but am often taking care of my 90 year old dad (which I’m so fortunate to still have). Writing is grounding, centering, and a passion of mine. Thank you John, for taking the time to read one of mine, and for all the hard work that conducting a contest means!

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