Snake Bit

I was thirteen and you...well you, a sophomore by then..
that night you stopped by to see me, at the Jr high game.

Friends most of our lives..you called me "kid" and I loved it when you did!
Hey "kid" come go for a ride on my new motorcycle! 
The night was cool..you slipped your leather football jacket around me and
we both laughed as I disappeared into its sleeves.

What would I have to give to once again relive .. the way you looked at me just then?
As though you'd never really seen me before..like I was no longer a kid..

Your big hands gently touching my face..fingers running through my long
black hair..carefully exploring my mouth as though you were tasting my smiles..

Suddenly, you jumped back like you had just been snake bitten,
and we were both laughing again.....

You never called me "kid" again...
I never told you, that was my first kiss..



12-8-2013
©Donna Jones
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013

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February 11, 2014 at 8:27 PM
Amazing and wonderful Donna... SKAT
Crenshaw Avatar
January 16, 2014 at 7:49 PM
very well done! wow. great job
Mehta Avatar
January 15, 2014 at 6:30 AM
Inspiring thoughts to give up something to relive and congrats on the fine win, Donna
Guzzi Avatar
January 12, 2014 at 6:00 PM
Ahhh this is very publishable ;). A fav Light & Love
Mohammed Avatar
December 27, 2013 at 2:32 PM
Very good Donna. I hope you had a wonderful Christmas. Wishing you all the best for the new year.
Flannery Avatar
December 21, 2013 at 1:34 PM
Very nicely written Donna and very sweet and innocent. Also enjoy your expressiveness in your work. I hope you have a very special holiday season. Take care.
Peterson Avatar
December 21, 2013 at 2:49 AM
Absorbing, I hung on every word.
Dunn Avatar
December 20, 2013 at 2:39 PM
Wow great work i felt like i was their watching everything with ya. this is what poetry is meant to do. loved it kido. cheri
Dietrich Avatar
December 19, 2013 at 10:23 PM
OH MY GOSH, how did I EVER miss this. I love this. So perfect for the contest. A FAVE
Dome Avatar
December 13, 2013 at 7:22 PM
Such a greatl write. you have brought back some wonderful cherished memories back for me tonight . Never really got over my first love, best year of my life. thank toy so much for sharing. best wishes. Pete.
Watkins Avatar
December 12, 2013 at 1:41 PM
I love this. It succinctly captures the innocence and magic of young love. Well done. Thank you. Gary
Jones Avatar
December 12, 2013 at 8:20 PM
Thank you....for the nice compliment and for stopping by....
Melugin Avatar
December 11, 2013 at 5:29 PM
Donna You took me back in time with you! You are a passionate and brilliant writer. My Best.. chuck
Jones Avatar
December 12, 2013 at 8:16 PM
Thank you very much....
Sirak Avatar
December 11, 2013 at 7:53 AM
Romantic and lovely. Ah, a girl's first kiss is a sweet memory that never fades.
Jones Avatar
December 12, 2013 at 8:12 PM
Hello Monterey....for sure right? Thanks so much for stopping
Lamoureux Avatar
December 10, 2013 at 11:26 PM
Wowzer, this is hot, sweet and delicious all at the same time. To my favorites Donna!
Lamoureux Avatar
December 12, 2013 at 10:48 PM
Ypu have made me smile many times, I am glad I can return the favor.
Jones Avatar
December 12, 2013 at 8:02 PM
Awesome Richard....thank you so much...you made me smile tonight
Andresen Avatar
December 10, 2013 at 1:38 PM
- A sweet and very nice memory to share Donna - love it - Good luck in the contest. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
Jones Avatar
December 10, 2013 at 11:09 PM
Thank you sweet Anne Lise...
Hunter Avatar
December 9, 2013 at 2:10 PM
I though it was excellent, Donna. It's easy for the reader to see it, if the reader will read it. It's quite vivid, actually.
Jones Avatar
December 9, 2013 at 7:27 PM
Thanks for your support below means alot
Jones Avatar
December 9, 2013 at 7:23 PM
Ahhh.thanks lil bro....and try not to think anyone will EVER see your daughter this way haha..:-) :-) lol
Tacito Avatar
December 9, 2013 at 10:31 AM
You know what, this is a personal poem. Yes.That's what makes this even more important than just a typical poem. Of course, we don't know who the person you speak of is, that's the whole point! It's from the heart, from your memory. You shared that with us. It's not always easy to do that. This was a story filled with innocence & laughter from the days of old. You didn't exclude me. You included me in this poetic memory. People would & should know how to appreciate that.
Jones Avatar
December 9, 2013 at 7:27 PM
Thanks for your support means alot
Jones Avatar
December 9, 2013 at 7:19 PM
I'm glad you enjoyed my memory Drake...one only I would want to relive..:-)
Fraser Avatar
December 9, 2013 at 10:26 AM
Sorry to read that comment at the bottom Donna, poetry is not about knowing who the characters are, its about the message behind the characters and you bring it out fabulously, blessings, Carl
Jones Avatar
December 9, 2013 at 7:29 PM
Thanks for your support means alot
Jones Avatar
December 9, 2013 at 7:18 PM
Thank you Carl...very kind indeed...
Mehta Avatar
December 9, 2013 at 5:11 AM
Very ro9mantic write, Donna
Jones Avatar
December 9, 2013 at 7:29 PM
Thanks for your support means alot
Jones Avatar
December 9, 2013 at 7:16 PM
Very sweet of you Dr Ram....
Trifiatis Avatar
December 9, 2013 at 5:03 AM
Tender and romantic that makes one go back in time and relieve ecstatic moments like this! Marvelously written! A 7! Good luck in the contest dear, Donna!
Jones Avatar
December 9, 2013 at 7:30 PM
Thanks for your support means alot
Jones Avatar
December 9, 2013 at 7:16 PM
Thank you very much sir
Sivey Avatar
December 8, 2013 at 10:37 PM
I love this, this is a tremendous and enlightening write my friend! I surely loved reading this positively glorious poem this evening What a masterfully sentimental piece, Great Work!!
Jones Avatar
December 9, 2013 at 7:31 PM
Thanks for your support means alot
Jones Avatar
December 8, 2013 at 10:44 PM
Ah thanks Russell...:-) good luck tomorrow..
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