Snake Bit

I was thirteen and you...well you, a sophomore by then..
that night you stopped by to see me, at the Jr high game.

Friends most of our lives..you called me "kid" and I loved it when you did!
Hey "kid" come go for a ride on my new motorcycle! 
The night was cool..you slipped your leather football jacket around me and
we both laughed as I disappeared into its sleeves.

What would I have to give to once again relive .. the way you looked at me just then?
As though you'd never really seen me before..like I was no longer a kid..

Your big hands gently touching my face..fingers running through my long
black hair..carefully exploring my mouth as though you were tasting my smiles..

Suddenly, you jumped back like you had just been snake bitten,
and we were both laughing again.....

You never called me "kid" again...
I never told you, that was my first kiss..



12-8-2013
©Donna Jones

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013



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Date: 2/11/2014 8:27:00 PM
Amazing and wonderful Donna... SKAT
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Date: 1/16/2014 7:49:00 PM
very well done! wow. great job
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Date: 1/15/2014 6:30:00 AM
Inspiring thoughts to give up something to relive and congrats on the fine win, Donna
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Date: 1/12/2014 6:00:00 PM
Ahhh this is very publishable ;). A fav Light & Love
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Date: 12/27/2013 2:32:00 PM
Very good Donna. I hope you had a wonderful Christmas. Wishing you all the best for the new year.
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Date: 12/21/2013 1:34:00 PM
Very nicely written Donna and very sweet and innocent. Also enjoy your expressiveness in your work. I hope you have a very special holiday season. Take care.
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Date: 12/21/2013 2:49:00 AM
Absorbing, I hung on every word.
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Date: 12/20/2013 2:39:00 PM
Wow great work i felt like i was their watching everything with ya. this is what poetry is meant to do. loved it kido. cheri
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Date: 12/19/2013 10:23:00 PM
OH MY GOSH, how did I EVER miss this. I love this. So perfect for the contest. A FAVE
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Date: 12/13/2013 7:22:00 PM
Such a greatl write. you have brought back some wonderful cherished memories back for me tonight . Never really got over my first love, best year of my life. thank toy so much for sharing. best wishes. Pete.
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Date: 12/12/2013 1:41:00 PM
I love this. It succinctly captures the innocence and magic of young love. Well done. Thank you. Gary
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Donna Jones
Date: 12/12/2013 8:20:00 PM
Thank you....for the nice compliment and for stopping by....
Date: 12/11/2013 5:29:00 PM
Donna You took me back in time with you! You are a passionate and brilliant writer. My Best.. chuck
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Donna Jones
Date: 12/12/2013 8:16:00 PM
Thank you very much....
Date: 12/11/2013 7:53:00 AM
Romantic and lovely. Ah, a girl's first kiss is a sweet memory that never fades.
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Donna Jones
Date: 12/12/2013 8:12:00 PM
Hello Monterey....for sure right? Thanks so much for stopping
Date: 12/10/2013 11:26:00 PM
Wowzer, this is hot, sweet and delicious all at the same time. To my favorites Donna!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/12/2013 10:48:00 PM
Ypu have made me smile many times, I am glad I can return the favor.
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Donna Jones
Date: 12/12/2013 8:02:00 PM
Awesome Richard....thank you so much...you made me smile tonight
Date: 12/10/2013 1:38:00 PM
- A sweet and very nice memory to share Donna - love it - Good luck in the contest. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 12/10/2013 11:09:00 PM
Thank you sweet Anne Lise...
Date: 12/9/2013 2:10:00 PM
I though it was excellent, Donna. It's easy for the reader to see it, if the reader will read it. It's quite vivid, actually.
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Date: 12/9/2013 7:27:00 PM
Thanks for your support below means alot
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Donna Jones
Date: 12/9/2013 7:23:00 PM
Ahhh.thanks lil bro....and try not to think anyone will EVER see your daughter this way haha..:-) :-) lol
Date: 12/9/2013 10:31:00 AM
You know what, this is a personal poem. Yes.That's what makes this even more important than just a typical poem. Of course, we don't know who the person you speak of is, that's the whole point! It's from the heart, from your memory. You shared that with us. It's not always easy to do that. This was a story filled with innocence & laughter from the days of old. You didn't exclude me. You included me in this poetic memory. People would & should know how to appreciate that.
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Date: 12/9/2013 7:27:00 PM
Thanks for your support means alot
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Donna Jones
Date: 12/9/2013 7:19:00 PM
I'm glad you enjoyed my memory Drake...one only I would want to relive..:-)
Date: 12/9/2013 10:26:00 AM
Sorry to read that comment at the bottom Donna, poetry is not about knowing who the characters are, its about the message behind the characters and you bring it out fabulously, blessings, Carl
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Date: 12/9/2013 7:29:00 PM
Thanks for your support means alot
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Donna Jones
Date: 12/9/2013 7:18:00 PM
Thank you Carl...very kind indeed...
Date: 12/9/2013 5:11:00 AM
Very ro9mantic write, Donna
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Date: 12/9/2013 7:29:00 PM
Thanks for your support means alot
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Donna Jones
Date: 12/9/2013 7:16:00 PM
Very sweet of you Dr Ram....
Date: 12/9/2013 5:03:00 AM
Tender and romantic that makes one go back in time and relieve ecstatic moments like this! Marvelously written! A 7! Good luck in the contest dear, Donna!
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Date: 12/9/2013 7:30:00 PM
Thanks for your support means alot
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Donna Jones
Date: 12/9/2013 7:16:00 PM
Thank you very much sir
Date: 12/8/2013 10:37:00 PM
I love this, this is a tremendous and enlightening write my friend! I surely loved reading this positively glorious poem this evening What a masterfully sentimental piece, Great Work!!
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Date: 12/9/2013 7:31:00 PM
Thanks for your support means alot
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Donna Jones
Date: 12/8/2013 10:44:00 PM
Ah thanks Russell...:-) good luck tomorrow..
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