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Smitten With You

Have I ever told you? I was smitten with you then when we first met. A quiver ran down my body by your single look. Your fine archery couldn't have missed the shot as your crossbow-eyes aimed at me and your piercing sight like an arrow wounded my heart with venom of your lethal love. I couldn't have survived your fatal attack if you didn't aid me with your skilful nursing infused with adoration. You almost healed me with your romantic treatment and medicines made of love but residue of that venom still runs through my veins in my blood and fills my heart with unruly passion for you. I was too ignorant to know then but I know now that I am captivated by you and your tricks forever. You know how to make me suffer for your love. You are the one to make me ill and you are the one to cure me. Darling, you are my malady and you are my only remedy. I am still smitten with you and will be forever. Date: 11/12/2017

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Date: 3/8/2018 3:18:00 AM
I really relate to this and the words and imagery you chose such as the archery and venom ring true to my own feelings. Thanks for this, Afzal!
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Date: 3/9/2018 10:00:00 AM
I'm glad you liked, Brendan. Thank you for the kind words.
Date: 11/17/2017 8:50:00 PM
Wow - a Lady Cupid. Great comparisons with bitter sweet feelings obviously reciprocated. Enjoyed the write and I wish you all the best in the Contest - well worthy of top honors my friend...Maria
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Date: 11/26/2017 11:48:00 PM
Thank you for being so kind, Dear Maria.
Date: 11/17/2017 9:54:00 AM
WoW! I agree w/all of the other talented poetesses/poets ... this is one magnificent poem, Afzal. Great double-edged love meaning: the sickness and the cure. Absolutely a gold star poem, my dear friend. Love and smiles always.
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Date: 11/26/2017 11:47:00 PM
Thank you so much, Freddie.
Date: 11/16/2017 10:52:00 PM
Marvelous, Afzal, imagery is great. luck in the contest Hugs Eve ~`*est Hugs Eve ~`*
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Date: 11/26/2017 11:47:00 PM
Thanks, Eve.
Date: 11/14/2017 10:46:00 PM
very nicely done, Afzal. I like the metaphor here of the archery sharp shooter!
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Date: 11/26/2017 11:46:00 PM
Thank you Dear Friend.
Date: 11/13/2017 6:18:00 AM
Smitten indeed, your poetry reveals that, Afzal, beautiful:)
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Date: 11/26/2017 11:45:00 PM
Thanks, Jo.
Date: 11/12/2017 8:06:00 AM
A lovely poem that shows your love for this lady.. I hope she shares the same emotions for you..
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Date: 11/12/2017 11:59:00 AM
Thank you, S.O.

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