Jan Allison Poet Rhyme

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Smile - Andaree Ii Contest

She dreams of the happiest day of her life;
make vows and you become man and wife.
With such elegance and style
she’ll glide down the aisle
with a wide
smile.
Blushing bride,
her blue eyes beguile,
prays that their love is worthwhile,
filled with fun, contentment and no strife.
She dreams of the happiest day of her life.


10~06~15
Contest:- Andaree II
Sponsor Andrea Dietrich
Checked with how many Syllables

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Skat A October 21, 2015 at 9:29 PM Jan, Wonderful win.................. SKAT Jan Allison October 22, 2015 at 2:02 AM Thanks Skat:-) hugs Jan xx

Charlotte Puddifoot October 19, 2015 at 4:38 PM you did well here, jan, with what is rather a tricky form - i found it a challenge, anyway! congrats on your win in andrea's contest :) Jan Allison October 19, 2015 at 4:41 PM Thanks Charlotte I was delighted to place - I agree it is a very challenging form:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight October 18, 2015 at 4:45 PM Back to congratulate you on your fine win, Jan. Reading it again made me smile! Hugs, Sandra Jan Allison October 18, 2015 at 4:46 PM I was delighted to place Sandra:-)It is a challenging form and I really enjoyed writing the poem:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich October 17, 2015 at 8:59 PM Very sweet, Jan. I had no idea this was yours and I am glad to see you made my top ten!! congrats. Perfectly rhymed! Jan Allison October 17, 2015 at 9:03 PM Thanks Andrea I love the challenge of this form - this one took me less time to write than the first one I wrote for your original contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Judy Konos October 8, 2015 at 7:00 PM Well first off, I wish I had a figure like the one your poem portrays....with that said...This is Seriously KQQL Jan Allison October 8, 2015 at 7:50 PM Thanks Judy - oh to have a figure like that but its only on Barbie dolls I guess lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Janice Canerdy October 7, 2015 at 10:56 PM Well-done, Jan--lovely! Janice Jan Allison October 8, 2015 at 2:01 AM Thanks Janice:-) hugs Jan xx

Emile Pinet October 7, 2015 at 12:46 PM Your work just keeps on getting better. This is truly beautiful. Emile. Jan Allison October 7, 2015 at 12:49 PM Oh Thank you so much Emile I am amazed how much I have learned during my short time writing:-) hugs Jan xx

James Inman October 7, 2015 at 8:39 AM Beautifully written. Jan, happy yes but I also noticed a little concern written in there. I believe my wife was happy at our wedding but the stress I saw on her face made me wonder if it was worth it for her. Jan Allison October 7, 2015 at 8:45 AM We organised arranged and paid for our wedding -did what WE wanted and had a great time with a quiet ceremony and a big party later - so often it gets out of hand and it can be very stressful:-) hugs Jan xx Jan Allison October 7, 2015 at 8:43 AM Yes there is concern in the poem - people dream married life will be 'perfect' but that is reserved for fairy tales!:-) hugs jan xx

Demetrios Trifiatis October 7, 2015 at 5:29 AM What a marvel of a Rhyme and so aesthetically done! Delightful and a 7, dear Jan! Jan Allison October 7, 2015 at 5:33 AM Thanks Demetrios it is quite a challenging form I just hope Andrea likes her Andaree:-) hugs Jan xx

CayCay Godwin October 7, 2015 at 2:06 AM There is an innocence to this touching Andaree that is very pretty. The simplest of wishes and hopes delivered in a challenging form. I really enjoyed it ... CayCay Jan Allison October 7, 2015 at 5:01 AM Thanks so much Caycay I do appreciate your support:-) hugs Jan xx

Laura Leiser October 6, 2015 at 9:59 PM Love this happy, optimistic poem, Jan :) You mastered this form very well! Good luck in the contest :) Jan Allison October 6, 2015 at 10:02 PM Thanks Laura:-) hugs jan xx

Michael Tor October 6, 2015 at 8:34 PM One of my favorites Jan. Nice contest entry. Jan Allison October 6, 2015 at 8:38 PM Thanks so much Michael:-) I do hope Andrea likes it too:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight October 6, 2015 at 6:48 PM Such a lovely Andaree, Jan! So full of the happy bride's dreams, and it flows wonderfully. Best in the contest! Hugs, Sandra Jan Allison October 6, 2015 at 6:49 PM Thanks Sandra I do hope Andrea likes it:-) hugs jan xx

Alexis Y. October 6, 2015 at 6:40 PM Jan, this is beautiful. I see why she's smiling. Great job! Good luck in the contest:-)Alexis 7 Jan Allison October 6, 2015 at 6:47 PM Thanks Alexis:-) hugs jan xx

Jaycee Cervenka October 6, 2015 at 5:35 PM I've now read several of the Andarees and find them delightful. Andrea has come up with this form that seems to work well on many topics. Love your wedding smile. Good luck in the contest my friend. Janet Jan Allison October 6, 2015 at 5:49 PM It is a challenging form Janet - the first one I wrote for the original contest took me 3 hours this one considerably less time:-) I just hope Andrea likes it too:-) hugs Jan xx

Eric Boddie October 6, 2015 at 4:06 PM this is every lady's dream....a Beautiful day with the perfect scene....neither hair nor dress can have a single flaw....weddings are presided over by only bridal law....;) Jan Allison October 6, 2015 at 4:07 PM What a charming comment Eric:-) hugs jan xx

Tim Smith October 6, 2015 at 3:20 PM Well you know I like this one better than the other. I believe in love, smiles. and happily ever afters. This will do well Jan Jan Allison October 6, 2015 at 3:31 PM Thanks Tim I do find this quite a challenge - the first one I wrote for the first contest took me three hours ... thankfully this one considerably less time - i do hope Andrea likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Anita Sharma October 6, 2015 at 1:06 PM wow this is beautiful write.liked Jan Allison October 6, 2015 at 1:07 PM Thanks so much Anita i found it quite a challenging form:-) hugs jan xx

Constance La France October 6, 2015 at 12:14 PM Jan, this is so sweet and charming, a smiling 7 and thanks for visiting my poem, Halloween memories .... Jan Allison October 6, 2015 at 12:19 PM Thanks so much for dropping by to comment I do appreciate your support:-) hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud October 6, 2015 at 12:10 PM enticing write so well expressed, jan... i can imagine you being the bride!.. huggs Jan Allison October 6, 2015 at 12:18 PM We got married in a registry office - just close friends and family then we had a meal at a local hotel and later on a party for over 300 people:-) I got married in an apricot shade two piece - I'm not one for fuss frills or flounces lol:-) hugs jan xx

Balveen Cheema October 6, 2015 at 11:57 AM That's real shweet Jan! Love Jan Allison October 6, 2015 at 12:01 PM Aww thanks Balveen:-) hugs Jan xx

Harry Horsman October 6, 2015 at 10:23 AM Just love your message here Jan, and the sentiment.. Jan Allison October 6, 2015 at 11:52 AM Thanks Harry I hope I have got the form right for Andrea - I found it quite a challenge!:-) hugs jan xx